Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the exports of five different things earning in billions from 2015 to 2016. While, the table chart demonstrates the proportion transformation in each category of exports during 2015and 2016.
overall, the highest number of petroleum products delivered and the least for textiles in both years. However, the percentage was inclined in all products except from gems and jewellery.
To begin with, more than 60 billion money was earned from petroleum products in 2015 and 2016 which was declined slightly to under 60 billions in 2015 compared 61billions in 2016 for engineered goods. Then figure was continuously fall up to almost 30 billions for textiles in both year, while this number for gems and jewrllery was nearly 40 billions and 30 billions for agricultural products in 2015 and 2016.
Moreover, The percentage of change in values was reduced for agricultural products (.81%), however this figure for textiles increased quickly by 15.24% which was almost half for En
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to accurately report the figures. For instance, the description of petroleum products and engineered goods is confusing and contradicts the visual data provided in the chart. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the report of the percentage changes is incomplete, as the text cuts off mid-sentence. While the main features are identified, the lack of precision in reporting the data and the failure to complete the analysis significantly hinder the task achievement. To improve, ensure that data points are clearly stated and that the summary is fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the overall structure. However, the logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and grammatical errors. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'Moreover' are used, but they do not always connect ideas logically. The referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. The abrupt ending of the final paragraph also negatively impacts the cohesion of the response. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear transitions between sentences would enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'proportion transformation' instead of 'percentage change' and 'more than 60 billion money' instead of '60 billion dollars'. Spelling errors like 'jewrllery' and 'declined' used incorrectly as a verb form ('was declined') further detract from the quality. The student relies on basic terminology and struggles to use precise academic vocabulary to describe trends or data points. Expanding the range of synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' and focusing on correct collocations would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the highest number of petroleum products delivered', and incorrect tense usage. The sentence structures are often simplistic or fragmented, and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. The incomplete sentence at the end of the text is a significant grammatical failure. To reach a higher band, the student needs to focus on sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that complex structures are used with greater accuracy.
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