Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart illustrate the rates of export between the year ([redacted phone]) respectively across the export earnings with different category product like (Petroleum product Engineered goods Gems and jewellery Agricultural product and textiles) five different product sales in 2015 and 2016, Overall a marked trends of percentages changes in value although product category .The bar chart also indicate the percentage change in values ([redacted phone]) respectively the figure shows the Petroleum product and Engineered goods are going to increase approximately in two years has been 60% to 62% and (55%-60%) on the other side Gems and jewellery agricultural products and textiles further shows the value of increase in two years 40 to 30 25 to 30 its shows the petrolium has huges e
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some categories, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. The data interpretation is also inaccurate; for instance, you misread the percentage changes and the export values. To improve, ensure you cover all categories mentioned in the prompt and provide a clear, accurate summary of the data rather than listing isolated figures. The response ends abruptly, leaving the analysis unfinished.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure, appearing as a single, disjointed block of text. There is a lack of logical progression, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal and often mechanical. For example, phrases like 'on the other side' are used incorrectly to transition between ideas. The lack of proper punctuation and sentence boundaries makes it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To improve, use clear paragraphing to separate the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and use linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'increase' and 'value' without demonstrating the ability to use more precise academic language. There are also significant issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'petrolium' and 'huges e'. The vocabulary used is often insufficient to convey the data accurately. To improve, focus on learning synonyms for 'increase' (e.g., 'rose', 'climbed', 'surged') and practice using topic-specific vocabulary related to charts and economic data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses, and a lack of proper sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making the text difficult to parse. The use of complex structures is attempted but consistently results in errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization errors.
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