Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line graph display information about values of export in the time of 2015 to 2016
Overall, patrolium and Engineer good or textiles improve or germs and jewelery is remain same or agriculture is slightly go up the percentage of germs and jewelery fluctuated between [redacted phone]
Patrolium is increase slightly 3% like in 2015 patrol price is 60 and in 2016 increasing to 63 so as compare patrolium to engineer goods increase more in the 2016 like increase 8.5% in the 2015 engineered goods is on 57 and after one year it take place to 62 on another side germs and jewelery go downward because in 2015 germs and jewelery rate is high 43 and in 2016 its decrease go down 5.18% as compare to germs and jewelery agriculture product raises there value like in 2015 agriculture slighthly down and in 2016 its increase little bit 0.81% and the Textile is rapidly increase in 2016 and its a huge inreaseing element the percentage is 15.24
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarize the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main trends. While you mention some categories, the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that 'gems and jewellery' remained the same, yet you later describe a decrease of 5.18%. The report lacks a logical structure, and the data points are presented in a way that makes it difficult for the reader to follow the comparisons. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the values in 2015 and 2016 and focus on the most significant changes rather than listing every figure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to navigate. There is no clear logical progression; ideas are presented in a disjointed manner, and the use of cohesive devices is very limited. Phrases like 'on another side' are used incorrectly to transition between points. To improve, you should organize your response into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific categories. Using linking words such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', and 'whereas' would help connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'patrolium' (petroleum) and 'germs' (gems). You rely on basic verbs like 'increase' and 'go down' throughout the text. There is also a lack of precision in terminology; for instance, using 'element' to describe a category of export is inappropriate. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'experienced a significant rise', 'witnessed a decline', or 'remained relatively stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('patrolium... increase slightly'), incorrect tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making the text difficult to read. For example, 'the percentage of germs and jewelery fluctuated between 2015 2016' lacks necessary prepositions and clarity. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using correct punctuation to separate your ideas.
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