Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The value of a country's exports various categories in different years. usually , the percentage change of exports in different by years and category and information about country's exports earning based on the year 2015 and 2016.
firstly, country's most money making export which is petroleum product by year 2016 , the country gain 3% then the year 2015 . however, for gems and jewellery , the percentage of export earning decreased by 5.18% by the year 2016.whilst, engineered goods earning also they follow petroleum products earning by 8% on 2015 than 2016 the value increased more than 50billion to 60billion in year .the engineers in the country have gained more by year 2016,
moving to further details, agricultural products and textiles earned more 0.8% and 15.24% respectively . however , people gain income about more than 30 billion in both years . whilst, in textiles ,it gains popularity in year 2016 and earned was increased by more than 15.24% in the year 2015 .textiles products earned about more than 25 billions in year 2015 and earned more than 30 billion in next year.
overall, gems and jewellery has decreased earning .however, money making export at still third position from the country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the chart and table provided, touching upon several key categories such as petroleum products, gems and jewellery, and engineered goods. However, the interpretation of the data is frequently confusing, inaccurate, or incomplete. For instance, the student states that the country gained 3% in petroleum products compared to 2015, but misreads or misrepresents many figures and percentages throughout the text, leading to a weak overall overview and limited development of main features. The introduction fails to provide a clear summary of the visual data. Consequently, this performance aligns closely with Band 5, where the task is addressed only partially and ideas are limited or unclear.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text exhibits severe organisational and cohesive issues. While basic transition markers like 'firstly', 'moving to further details', and 'overall' are attempted, they fail to structure the response into logical paragraphs. The paragraphs are dense and difficult to follow due to poor referencing ('they follow petroleum products earning') and repetitive structures. There is no clear overall progression or logical grouping of data. Cohesive devices are often inadequate or misused. This corresponds to Band 4, as information and ideas are not arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on phrases like 'earned', 'earning', and 'more than'. There are noticeable lexical inaccuracies and odd word choices, such as 'most money making export' and 'the engineers in the country have gained more'. Spelling and word formation errors also appear, limiting the range of vocabulary to a minimally adequate level where communication is occasionally strained. This fits the Band 4 descriptor, where vocabulary is basic and repetitive, causing difficulty for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or poorly constructed compound sentences that are frequently ungrammatical. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and clause structure (e.g., 'the value increased more than 50billion to 60billion in year', 'it gains popularity in year 2016 and earned was increased'). Punctuation is also erratic and spacing errors are frequent. These frequent errors distort meaning and make parts of the text difficult to read, which is characteristic of Band 4.
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