Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The presented bar graph provided inforamation about countries export earning in different categories such as petroleum products, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products, textiles in period of 2015 to 2016. while, provided table depits the propostional ratio of product category.
Overall, It was evident that petroleum products were highest export earning in both year 2015 and 2016 while, textiles was extream propotional ratio eran which is 15.24%. in contarst, textiles was least export earning in 2015. on the other hand agriculture products were least ratio earned in both year.
In 2015, petroleum products were highest transport earning which is 60 billions followed by engineered goods was earned 58 billions in 2015. moreover, In 2016 agricultural products and textiles were equal selling which is 31 billions. however, petroleum products and englineered goods was only 1% different.
on the other hand textiles was earned more percentage ratio through above category. furthurmore, agricultural products were least amount of ratio which is 0.81%. In addition engineered goods and gemas and jewellery were only 3.32 %different in both year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting information from both the bar chart and the table. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, the student states that 'textiles was least export earning in 2015', whereas the chart clearly shows textiles earned 26 billion, making it lower than agricultural products (31 billion), but the comparative numbers are frequently confused or misstated. Additionally, the overview attempts to highlight main features such as petroleum products being the highest, but it is marred by grammatical confusion and inaccurate figures, such as claiming agricultural products and textiles were equal in 2016 at 31 billion when textiles was 31.5 and agriculture was 31.5 (which is close, but other data points are misread). These errors and under-developed comparisons place the response in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing sentences and abrupt transitions, such as starting paragraphs with 'In 2015...' and 'on the other hand textiles was earned...'. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly (e.g., 'while, provided table depits', 'in contarst'). Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is poor, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Referencing and linking between sentences often fail, resulting in a disjointed structure that aligns with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-form and spelling errors (e.g., 'inforamation', 'depits', 'propostional ratio', 'extream', 'eran', 'contarst', 'englineered', 'gemas'). The student attempts less common vocabulary like 'proportional ratio', but uses these terms inaccurately and inappropriately. The limited range of vocabulary and frequent spelling errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning in several places, which is characteristic of a Band 4.0 to 4.5 level, comfortably landing at Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent, fundamental errors in subject-verb agreement, tense, and voice (e.g., 'The presented bar graph provided inforamation about countries export earning', 'petroleum products were highest transport earning which is 60 billions', 'textiles was earned more percentage ratio'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, with sentences starting with lowercase letters ('on the other hand'). Because errors are frequent and often distort meaning or cause strain for the reader, the writing falls into Band 4.0.
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