Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE BAR GRAPH ILLUSTRATE INFORMATION ABOUT AN EXPORT EARNINGS IN 2015 TO 2016 ON 5 DIFFERENT CATEGORIES, WHILE TABLE SHOW A DATA ABOUT PERCENTAGE CHANGE IN EACH CATEGORY IN 2016 AS COMPARE TO 2015.
OVERALL, AS PER VLAUES OF BAR CHART IT IS CLEARLY SHOW THAT PETROLIUM PRODUCTION GENRATED HIGHEST IN A BOTH YEARS. IN CONTRAST, IN A TEXTILES EXPORT IT IS RECORDED LEAST EARNING IN A BOTH YEARS. MOREOVER, THE MAJOR CHANGES SHOWN IN AN ENGINEERED GOODS SALES INCREASED IN 2016 AS COMPARE TO 2015.
IN GEMS AND JEWELLERY PRODUCT EXPORTING THERE WAS HIGHER THAN AN AGRICULTURAL AND TEXTILE PRODUCTION IN A BOTH YEARS, BUT IT WAS ALSO NOTICED THAT AN EXPORT IN A GEMS AND JEWELLERY WERE DESCREASED IN 2016 AS COMPARE TO 2015 AROUND 2 OR 3 BILLION. BUT IN A TEXTILES EXPORT PRODUCTION SIGNIFICANTLY UP THEN PAST YEAR SOMETHING 5 BILLIONS UP.
IN CANGES IN PERCENTAGE VALUES FOR 2015 TO 2016, THE RAPIDLY UPGRADE NOTICED IN TEXTILES SECTOR 15.24%, AND MINOR RISE ROECORD IN AGRICULRUEAL PRODUCTS, ENGINEERED GOOD AND PETROLEUM PRODUCTS. THERE WAS ONLY ONE PRODUCT CATEGORY THAT FALL IN VALUES IS A GEMS AND JEWELLERY SECTOR.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The candidate addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both the bar graph and the table, making relevant comparisons such as noting that petroleum products generated the highest earnings in both years while textiles recorded the least. Key trends are identified, including the decrease in gems and jewellery and the significant rise in textiles. However, the response contains several inaccuracies in reading the data, such as claiming that gems and jewellery were higher than agricultural and textile production in both years, whereas textiles were actually lower in 2015 ($26B vs $43B) but higher or equal in other metrics. Additionally, some statements lack precision. Overall, the response meets the basic requirements for covering the visual data, but factual errors limit its score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into four paragraphs, reflecting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the charts. However, logical progression is hindered by poor phrasing, repetitive transition markers, and mechanical cohesive devices like 'IN CANGES IN PERCENTAGE VALUES'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas lacks seamless cohesion. Referencing between sentences is sometimes unclear, requiring the reader to work harder to follow the comparisons. While an overall structure is present, the faulty transitions and awkward grouping of information keep this criterion at a band 5.5 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, featuring frequent misspellings and incorrect word forms such as 'ILLUSTRATE' instead of 'illustrates', 'PETROLIUM PRODUCTION' instead of 'petroleum products', and 'DESCREASED' instead of 'decreased'. The candidate attempts some less common terms like 'SIGNIFICANTLY' and 'PERCENTAGE', but inaccurate word choice and severe spelling errors ('VLAUES', 'GENRATED', 'ROECORD', 'AGRICULRUEAL') impede communication at times. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for conveying precise data trends, anchoring the score firmly at band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, with attempts at complex forms being noticeably faulty, such as 'WHILE TABLE SHOW A DATA ABOUT PERCENTAGE CHANGE' and 'AS COMPARE TO'. There are persistent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('THE BAR GRAPH ILLUSTRATE INFORMATION ABOUT AN EXPORT EARNINGS'), incorrect prepositions ('IN A BOTH YEARS'), and tense confusion. Punctuation is basic, and the entire response is written in capital letters, which is inappropriate for an IELTS writing task. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited grammatical range.
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