Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
By analysis of the whole graph I come to that point that the prices of export increase by the time because with the passage of time the demand of things increases petroleum products earning increase because as per demand increases price also increases and petroleum products are the basic needs at this time . In Engineering products we can see a major difference between the comparison of two years. Engineering products are need for improvement and advancement. However, the prices of Gems and jewelry decrease by 5.18% this is a huge down fall by my opinion the interest of women and ladies may reduced in jewelry and they have mindset to buy a land or other investments . The agricultural products have a little bit increase in it's exportation the country may have hurdle in agriculture land. At the end we can see a major change in textile industry. The whole graph shows the success of exporting material of a country in various fields.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the visual data, but it fails to meet key requirements for an Academic Task 1. The prompt asks for an objective summary of the main features and comparisons, yet the student includes subjective speculation and personal opinion (e.g., 'by my opinion the interest of women and ladies may reduced in jewelry and they have mindset to buy a land'). While the student mentions several categories such as petroleum products, engineering products, gems and jewellery, and textiles, the data is not clearly reported, and there is no proper overview of the trends. The focus shifts towards guessing the causes behind the numbers rather than describing the chart objectively, leading to an under-developed and unfocused response that aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from severe structural and cohesive deficiencies. The entire response is written as a single, massive run-on block of text without any paragraph breaks. There is a complete lack of standard cohesive devices or punctuation to guide the reader through the information. Sentences run into one another using basic comma splices or missing punctuation entirely (e.g., 'petroleum products earning increase because as per demand increases price also increases and petroleum products are the basic needs at this time'). Consequently, the organisation lacks clear progression and overall logical arrangement, corresponding to a Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted (e.g., 'prices', 'export', 'products', 'major change'). There are notable word choice and collocation inaccuracies throughout, such as 'prices of export increase' instead of 'export earnings', 'down fall', and 'little bit increase in it's exportation'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'advancement' and 'exportation', but the overall lexical range is narrow, and frequent errors in word formation and phrasing strain the reader's understanding, fitting the Band 4.0 criteria.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is characterised by a lack of proper punctuation, resulting in run-on sentences and a complete absence of periods for long stretches. There is a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent errors in basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'earning increase', 'prices of Gems and jewelry decrease'), and missing articles. Complex sentences are rarely attempted accurately, and errors frequently distort the meaning or cause difficulty for the reader, matching Band 4.0 descriptors.
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