Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In this graph , today im talking about Export Earnings [redacted phone] the value of one country's Exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.Mainly there is 5 product category are petroleum products, engineered goods, gems and jewellery , Agricultural products and textiles.
firstly, only gems and jewellery are high in 2015 fall down in 2016. Although petroleum or agricultural products are less in 2015 and rise in 2016 . Again engineered goods and textiles are less in 2015 and rise in 2016.
secondly, petroleum products 3% increased, engineered goods 8.5% increased, gems and jewellery 5.18% decreased, Agricultural products 0.81% increased, textiles 15.24% increased.
In my conclusion , only gems and jewellery fall down 2016 only . Like wise ,petroleum products , engineered goods , agricultural products and textiles are increased. Mainly graph are increased in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the task by mentioning the various categories of export earnings for 2015 and 2016, along with the percentage changes from the table. However, the response fails to provide an effective overview, presenting instead a fragmented list of data points without synthesising the main trends. Furthermore, the description contains factual inaccuracies regarding the visual data; for instance, the student states that only gems and jewellery fell, whereas most categories experienced various movements or increases, and some statements about specific trends are confused. Data values are sometimes listed mechanically rather than integrated into meaningful comparisons. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs that resemble a sequence of isolated sentences rather than a cohesive report. Discourse markers are used in a basic and repetitive manner, such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'In my conclusion', which creates a mechanical feel. There is a lack of smooth transitions between ideas, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the concluding sentences where general trends are muddled. Although there is a discernible overall structure attempting an introduction, body, and conclusion, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and poor cohesion, warranting a band score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words directly copied from the prompt such as 'export', 'earnings', 'category', 'products', and 'increased'. The student struggles with word choice and collocation, using phrases like 'today im talking about' which is inappropriate for an academic report. Words like 'fall down' and 'rise in' are used repetitively instead of more precise vocabulary suited for describing statistical charts, such as 'decrease', 'decline', or 'growth'. While the basic topic vocabulary is present, the range is extremely limited and errors in word formation and style are frequent, supporting a band score of 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences or poorly constructed compound-complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('there is 5 product category are'), missing articles, inappropriate tense usage ('im talking about'), and incorrect prepositions. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect spacing around punctuation marks. Complex structures are rare and when attempted, they are often faulty and impede smooth reading. This level of grammatical control corresponds to a band score of 4.5.
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