Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given charts illustrates the coxt of our country's export in many other categories between 2015 and 2016. The bar charts show that the percentage of every categries of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Overall, Textiles and Engineered goods had significantly surged the percentage in just one year respectively. In contrast, the percentage of agricultural products were slightly rose.
Firstly, the percentage of petroleum around 61% in 2015 but they slightlu increased around 64%. Moreever, the percentage of engineered goods was surged by 8.5% during 2015 and 2016. In addition, In 2015 the percentage of gems and jewellery around 46% however they were declined the percentage around 5.8% during one year time.
In contrast, the percentage of agricultural products were equal not more changes during 2015 and 2016. Lastly, the percentage of textiles around 25% then futhermore massive developed thr exporting products around more than 15%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts, identifying export categories such as petroleum products and textiles, and includes some specific percentage changes and values. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting (for instance, misinterpreting billons in dollars as percentages, such as stating petroleum was around 61%). Furthermore, the length requirement of 150 words was not met, as the response contains only 147 words. This under-length issue, combined with the imprecise handling of data and lack of a cohesive overview that fully encapsulates all main trends, results in a partial addressing of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting an overall summary followed by body paragraphs detailing specific categories. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor referencing and mechanical cohesive devices. Phrases like 'Firstly', 'Moreever', 'In addition', and 'In contrast' are used clumsily or repetitively, and referencing pronouns such as 'they' frequently lack clear antecedents, making the relationships between ideas confusing. Paragraphing is present but internal structuring within paragraphs fails to build a clear, coherent progression of comparative data.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors and awkward phrasing such as 'coxt', 'categries', 'significantly surged the percentage', and 'massive developed thr exporting products'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to trends (e.g., 'surged', 'declined'), but these are often incorrectly collocated or grammatically misused (e.g., 'were slightly rose'). Spelling and morphological errors ('slightlu', 'Moreever', 'futhermore') are noticeable and occasionally impede communication, placing the response firmly in the lower-intermediate band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple structures and failing to produce error-free complex sentences. There are frequent and severe grammatical errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'The given charts illustrates', 'the percentage of agricultural products were'), incorrect passive/active voice usage (e.g., 'they were declined the percentage'), and erroneous tense/form combinations. These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, reflecting weak control over basic sentence construction.
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