Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of one country's transports in diffrent five type of categories such as, petrolium products, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles in the year of 2015 and 2016
in year of 2015,petrolium prodcuts was the highest around 61%. Engineered good also followed it the value of the export at 55%.Gems and jewellery accounted 45%. Agricultral products and textiles was almist close around 3!% and 55% respectively.
In 2026, petrolium products and enginnered goods inceased slightly at same at 63%.However, gems and jewellery dropped from the 45% to 40%.Agricultral products remain at 31%. While, textlies transportation reached at 31%.
The percentage change values in this two years that petrolium products, engineered good, agricultral products and textilies increased.However, only gems and jewellery fell around 5.18%.
In conclusion,transportation in various categories in petrolium products and enginnered goods were the highest in both the year. While, agricultural products and textiles were lowesr catergory in exports.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all major features of the charts, identifying categories such as petroleum products and engineered goods as the highest earners, and noting general increases and decreases. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that engineered goods in 2015 were at 55% and agricultural products and textiles were around 55% respectively, whereas the graph clearly shows billions of dollars rather than percentages for values, and the figures read differently. Furthermore, the year 2026 is incorrectly referenced instead of 2016. The overview identifies the highest and lowest categories, but data misinterpretations and inaccurate figures restrict the score to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs addressing different years and data features, and a brief conclusion. However, logical progression is hindered by poor transitions and numerous mechanical errors in referencing. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inaccurately, such as the abrupt shift 'In year of 2015...' and 'In 2026...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall arrangement feels disjointed due to frequent structural flaws and unclear referencing between sentences. This places the response firmly in Band 5.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The student uses a very limited vocabulary range, frequently repeating words such as 'transports', 'categories', 'products', and 'transportation' in places where they are semantically inappropriate (e.g., 'transports' instead of 'exports'). There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'diffrent', 'petrolium', 'prodcuts', 'almist', 'incresed', 'enginnered', 'remain', 'textlies', and 'lowesr'. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling mistakes cause strain for the reader and restrict the lexical score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, evident in phrases like 'petrolium prodcuts was the highest', 'Agricultral products and textiles was almist close', and 'inceased slightly at same at 63%'. Punctuation is frequently missing or misused, and subject-verb agreement errors are common (e.g., 'textlies transportation reached'). Because errors are frequent and occasionally impede meaning, the grammatical range and accuracy score is Band 4.0.
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