Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the valueof one country's exports of earning in different categories from 2015 to 2016. The table represents the proportion change in each categories during 2015 and 2016.
Overall, export earning in several catagories such as petroleum products,engineered goods,gems and jewellery,agriculture products,textiles had made up higher proportion in 2016 compare to 2015. while, In agriculture products earning in 2015 and 2016 is slightly similar.
Petroleum products in 2016 was slightly higher than 2015 approximately, 63 billions. In contrast, engineered goods in 2015 decreased sharply and reached around, 55 billion in addition 2016 had similar to petroleum products accounted for 61 billion. Gems and jewellery had faced opposite change where in 2015 it made up around, 43 billion, however in 2016 it decrease and reached around 40 billion.
Textilies figure showed the highest increased by around 15.24% in 2016, which was followed by the engineered goods by 8.5%. The proportion in agricultural products was slightly increased around 0.81%, whereas gemes and jewellery had increased by 5.18% and petrolume products by 3%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of both the bar graph and the table, noting categories like petroleum products and textiles. However, there are notable inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data provided in the visual stimulus. For instance, the text states that engineered goods in 2015 decreased sharply and reached around 55 billion, whereas the chart shows 2015 at 57 billion and 2016 at 62 billion (an increase, not a decrease). Additionally, the concluding paragraph misinterprets the percentage change data, stating that gems and jewellery had increased by 5.18% when the table clearly shows a decrease (5.18%). These inaccuracies in data reporting prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a logical layout of an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific data. However, overall progression is hindered by confusing transitions and mechanical cohesion. For instance, the phrase 'while, In agriculture products earning in 2015 and 2016 is slightly similar' creates a disjointed sentence structure. Referencing and linking devices are sometimes awkward or inaccurate, such as 'in addition 2016 had similar to petroleum products'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs requires improvement.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for a basic description of the charts, including terms like 'proportion', 'category', and 'earnings'. However, there are frequent lexical errors and incorrect word forms, such as 'valueof', 'catagories', 'earning' instead of 'earnings', and 'Textilies'. The student attempts less common vocabulary like 'proportion' and 'categorisation' concepts, but inaccuracies in spelling and word choice ('petrolume', 'gemes') detract from the overall quality and occasionally impede clarity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'export earning in several catagories... had made up' and 'engineered goods in 2015 decreased sharply and reached around, 55 billion in addition 2016 had similar to petroleum products'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary commas breaking up sentences ('around, 63 billions'). These persistent errors frequently cause strain for the reader.
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