Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrates the merits of one nation's shipping accros five diffrent categories during the year 2015 and 2016 while, The table demostrate the ratio of each category of export in 2016 compare with 2015.
To commence with, petroleum products are highly shipping 62 billions in the year of 2016 meanwhile,3% of less export in the year of 2015.Engineered goods 8.5% increase in year 2016 contrast with 2015. In the other hand, gems and jewellery approx 5.18% deduction of shipping year between [redacted phone]. The farm products are significant increse 0.81% in both year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response falls well short of the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, finishing at only 94 words. This severely limits the development of the response. While the student attempts to present some information from both the bar chart and the table, the data points reported are frequently confused or inaccurately described. For instance, the text claims that petroleum products had '3% of less export in the year of 2015' when the chart shows 2015 was lower than 2016, and mixes up values and percentages across categories. Due to the very limited length, incomplete coverage, and confused reporting of the visual data, the response only minimally addresses the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text is divided into an introduction and a single short body paragraph, but the overall organization lacks logical progression and clear cohesion. Transition phrases are attempted with 'To commence with' and 'In the other hand', but they are used awkwardly or inaccurately. Referencing is also weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow which year or category certain figures apply to. Sentences often feel disjointed rather than flowing naturally from one point to the next, reflecting basic organizational skills that fall short of clearer, more structured reporting.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice, word form, and spelling. Examples include misspellings such as 'accros', 'diffrent', 'demostrate', 'increse', and awkward collocations like 'shipping accros' instead of 'exports' or 'shipping' used for financial values. The student attempts some less common terms like 'deduction' and 'significant increse', but these are used incorrectly or imprecisely. These lexical limitations and errors occasionally strain communication and require the reader to guess the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on fragmented or poorly constructed simple sentences. There are frequent errors in basic sentence structure, verb forms, and prepositions, such as 'petroleum products are highly shipping 62 billions' and 'approx 5.18% deduction of shipping year between 2015-2016'. Punctuation is also problematic, including run-on clauses and missing commas. These frequent errors disrupt the flow of reading and demonstrate poor control over basic grammatical structures.
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