Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart illustrate differnet categories petroleum, engineered and more expoting earning 2015 to 2016.
Overall, value change is different percentages. because every categrios modify. Pertoleum products, engineered goods, gem and jewllery and more products is change.
In 2015, pertoleum products roundabout 60 percent but 2016 mainer increas 3 percent because not high price increas. Engineered foods 2015, and 2016 not hug diffrence maximum 8.5 percent not using engineered goods but gems and jewellery 2015 in high demand and next year lowest 5.18 percent beacuse not positive respons.
On the others hand, agricultural products and textiles both are lowest products. Agricultural products firstly highest but then next year product ratio 0.81 percent becausa response is not good.Textiles very cheap part in chart because 2015 textile 25 and 30 percent in 2015 but 2016 increas 30 to 32 percent and singnificant response 15.24 percent. All in all every exports earning 2016 minor difference highest but numerous mostly benifit in earnings
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning categories such as petroleum products and engineered goods, and includes some specific figures like 8.5 percent and 15.24 percent. However, the information is presented in a very confused and fragmented way, leading to a partial and inaccurate understanding of the visual data. For example, the student misinterprets the units and data trends, stating that petroleum products were 'roundabout 60 percent' when the chart shows 61 billion dollars, and claims that agricultural products were 'firstly highest' which contradicts the chart. Ideas are underdeveloped, and key features are not clearly selected or reported, resulting in a minimal response to the visual data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body sections, and a concluding remark, showing some attempt at overall structure. However, there is no clear progression of ideas throughout the response, and the connection between sentences is frequently disrupted by confusing statements. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inaccurately, such as the abrupt transitions and misused phrases like 'On the others hand'. Referencing is unclear, and ideas jump between categories without a logical flow, making the overall arrangement difficult for the reader to follow smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on words directly lifted from the prompt or task image, such as 'petroleum products', 'engineered goods', and 'agricultural products'. There are numerous severe lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'differnet', 'expoting', 'categrios', 'Pertoleum', 'jewllery', 'beacuse', and 'singnificant'. These frequent errors in word form, choice, and spelling cause noticeable strain for the reader and reflect a very limited control over lexical resources.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, relying on simple sentences or faulty attempts at complex forms that often lack essential verbs or connectors, as seen in 'The bar chart illustrate differnet categories...' and 'value change is different percentages. because every categrios modify.' Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including severe subject-verb agreement issues, missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and poor punctuation. These persistent errors frequently distort the meaning and cause considerable difficulty for the reader in understanding the intended statements.
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