Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart give the information about the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
overall. in 2015 reach a pincncale is petrolieum products is 60% in 2015 and medal is engineered goods 45% IN 2015 lowest is textiles this one is only 25% in the flip side in 2016 higest is petolrm and secand is engineered goods this only 50% lowest is textiles only 30%.
it is cerliy seen from in 2015 higest peck of export is petrolium and secand one is engineerd goods 55% moreover gemes and jewellery is 45% lowest is both ones agricultural products and 30% textiles this is only 25%.
in the oter hand. in 2016 petromlime producats rech a pincncale is 63% in adtitonal engineered goods 60% and games and jewellery 42% howover agricultural products and textiles both are lowest part in 2016 they are only 31%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, coming in at 135 words (excluding the prompt text). Furthermore, the student misidentifies the visual data type in the introduction, calling it a 'pie chart' instead of a bar chart and table. The report attempts to highlight key features such as petroleum products and engineered goods being the highest in 2015 and 2016, but the data presented is heavily confused, inaccurate, and repetitive. Figures are incorrectly cited with percentages instead of billions (e.g., 'petrolieum products is 60%' and 'textiles this one is only 25%'), and the information is muddled with contradictory statements across the body paragraphs. Overall, the task is addressed only minimally due to the incomplete length, significant data inaccuracies, and fundamental misinterpretation of the source material.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response shows very poor organisation and a lack of coherent progression. The text is broken into fragmented paragraphs, but these lack logical structure and fail to guide the reader through the data clearly. Transitional phrases like 'on the flip side', 'it is cerliy seen from', and 'in the oter hand' are misused and mechanically bolted onto sentences, rather than serving to link ideas naturally. Referencing is extremely unclear, and the repetitive listing of categories without a clear overview or structured comparison results in a disjointed text where information is haphazardly restated rather than logically developed.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
Vocabulary is basic, highly repetitive, and marred by severe spelling errors throughout the text. Words such as 'pincncale' (peak/principal), 'petrolieum' (petroleum), 'medal' (middle), 'higest' (highest), 'secand' (second), 'cerliy' (clearly), 'peck' (peak), 'adtitonal' (addition), 'games' (gems), 'howover' (however), and 'otermark' (other) demonstrate a lack of control over basic and technical terms. While the student attempts to name the export categories, the persistent misspellings and inaccurate word choices ('medal' for middle, incorrect use of percentages) frequently impede communication and place the vocabulary firmly at a low level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak, featuring a very limited range of structures and frequent, heavy errors that distort meaning. There are numerous fragments and run-on sentences lacking proper verbs or conjunctions, such as 'overall. in 2015 reach a pincncale is petrolieum products...' and 'this only 50% lowest is textiles only 30%.' Subject-verb agreement is frequently violated, articles are missing or misused, and punctuation is largely neglected or used incorrectly (such as periods interrupting clauses). Complex sentence forms are virtually absent, and the structural inaccuracies cause severe difficulty for the reader.
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