Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar chart below illustrate the export earning in different categories in 2015 to 2016. The table portrays the proportion change in a specific category of exports in 2016 shows the change.
Overall, petroleum products showed the biggest decrease. Textile is earning the huge rise while gems and jewllwery decrease.
In general, in 2015 petroleum products recoded 60% earning, while in 2016 the same earning recorded at 62%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response identifies some relevant features, including the rise in textile earnings and the fall in gems and jewellery, and it attempts an overview. However, the overview incorrectly says petroleum products showed the biggest decrease; this category rose from about $61 billion to $63 billion. The only figures discussed are petroleum earnings, and the comparison is inaccurate in describing the values as percentages rather than billions. The other categories and the table’s changes are not reported, so the task is addressed only partially and the main features are not adequately supported. The response is also 82 words below the required minimum. To improve, give an accurate overview and compare several categories using the chart’s units.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening description is followed by an overview and then a detail sentence about petroleum products. This gives the reader some sense of progression. However, the response is too brief to develop a clear report, and the overview’s claims are not followed by supporting details. The opening repeats the idea of change (“proportion change” and “shows the change”) rather than clearly introducing both visuals. Linking and referencing are limited, with no developed comparisons between categories. Use a clear sequence—introduction, overview, then grouped details—and connect each overview point to accurate figures from the chart or table.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some task-related vocabulary, such as “export,” “categories,” “proportion change,” and “decrease,” so its basic subject is recognisable. There are also attempts to describe trends with “rise” and “recorded.” However, the range is limited, and several choices or spellings reduce precision: “export earning” is awkward, “Textile” should refer to the category as “textiles,” and “jewllwery” is misspelled. “60% earning” also uses the wrong unit and makes the meaning unclear; the chart reports earnings in billions of dollars. Aim for accurate collocations such as “export earnings,” “rose to,” and “fell by,” and use the chart’s units consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response communicates a few simple ideas, but grammatical control is uneven. In the opening, “The bar chart below illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “in 2015 to 2016” is an incorrect time construction. The second sentence, “The table portrays the proportion change … in 2016 shows the change,” has a faulty clause structure that makes the relationship between ideas unclear. “Textile is earning the huge rise” also has an awkward and incomplete grammatical pattern. Sentence forms are mostly simple, with little evidence of controlled complex structures. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build complete sentences, for example: “The table shows the percentage change in export values between 2015 and 2016.”
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