Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

I read this chart the chart shoe the value of one country exports various categories during 2015 and 2016. In 2016 the petroleum products is 63 % and 2015 is 60 %. In other like engineered goods is 2016 is 61 % compare to 2015 is 58 %. In third is been gems and jewellery is 2016 is 42 % and 2015 is been 40 % .And the next things is agricultural and products is have 2016 is 30 % and 2015 is 32 % . And other is textiles is 2016 is 25 % and 2015 is 31 %. In my opinion textiles is compare to 2015 is high and agriculture is 50 50. And gems is little low compare to 2015. Engineered is little high . And petroleum products is few high compare to 2015. Some products is little high and some low. Basically, 2015 and 2016 is between same in my opinion.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s five export categories and attempt to compare the two years, so the response is relevant to the task. However, several figures and trends are misreported: for example, gems and jewellery fell from about $43 billion to $41 billion, rather than rising from 40 to 42, while textiles rose from about $26 billion to $31.5 billion, rather than falling from 31 to 25. The claim that agriculture was “50 50” and that the years were “same” also obscures the actual pattern. A clear overview should highlight that most categories increased, gems and jewellery declined, and textiles had the largest percentage rise. More accurate selection and reporting of key features would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the chart’s category order, which gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs or a purposeful overview-and-details structure, and the repeated sequence “In…”, “And…”, and “other” makes the writing sound like a list rather than a connected summary. The final statements—“Some products is little high and some low” and “Basically… same”—repeat general impressions without resolving the comparisons. Group the main trend in an opening overview, then present the figures in a logical order, using clear links such as “whereas” and “by contrast.” This would improve progression and make relationships between categories easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes relevant chart terms such as “petroleum products,” “gems and jewellery,” and “compare,” so the reader can identify the subject of most sentences. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “little,” “high,” “low,” and “other.” Some choices are imprecise for describing data: “50 50” does not clearly express the small agricultural increase, and “few high” is not a natural way to describe a rise. Use more precise reporting language, such as “increased slightly,” “declined,” “remained broadly stable,” and “recorded the largest rise.” Also check category names and spelling, including “engineered goods,” to keep the description clear and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts simple comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent and sentence structures are very limited. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “the petroleum products is” and “agricultural and products is have.” Comparisons are also formed inaccurately in “2016 is 61 % compare to 2015 is 58 %,” while the opening repeats “I read this chart the chart.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries are unreliable, particularly around “40 % .And the next things…,” which makes the sequence harder to read. Practise complete comparison sentences with accurate past-tense verbs—for example, “Petroleum exports rose from about $61 billion in 2015 to $63 billion in 2016.” Varying these patterns while checking agreement and punctuation would improve clarity.

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