Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The linear presentation elucidatades information about the value country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015 at thr first glance, it can promptly noticed that there was overall increment export earning in prtroleum products 62$ billions in 2016 and decrement was textiles 26$ billions in 2015
From the given statistics, it is apparent that initialised 61$ billlexport earnings the value of petroleum productsions in 2016 in 2015 this figure elevated in2016 62$ billions while ,the value of textiles export earning diminished to 24$ billions in 2015 after hiking 31$ billions in 2016
On the other hand percentage change in values germs and je
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response identifies the topic and attempts to compare export values, but it does not provide a clear, accurate overview of the main trends. It says petroleum earnings were “62$ billions in 2016” and textiles were “26$ billions in 2015,” yet later gives conflicting figures, including textiles at 24 billion in 2015 and 31 billion in 2016. The chart shows petroleum rising from about 61 to 63 billion, textiles increasing from about 26 to 31.5 billion, and gems and jewellery declining. The final sentence begins to address percentage changes but is unfinished, leaving most categories unreported. The response is also 55 words below the 150-word minimum; 26 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Include a concise overview and accurate comparisons across the categories.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response into paragraphs and to signal contrast with “On the other hand.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the first paragraph combines an introduction, an overview attempt and figures, while the second repeats petroleum and textiles information with contradictory values. The final line, “percentage change in values germs and je,” is incomplete, so the reader cannot follow the intended comparison. Linking phrases such as “From the given statistics” do not compensate for unclear sequencing or references. Group the information into an introduction, a clear overview, and a paragraph comparing the main figures; use connectors only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The response attempts a range of reporting vocabulary, including “elucidatades,” “increment,” “decrement,” “elevated” and “diminished.” This shows an effort to use less common language, but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data, and spelling errors such as “prtroleum” and “billlexport” make parts difficult to understand. Phrases such as “linear presentation” and “initialised” do not clearly describe the bar chart or its values. More precise, familiar terms would communicate the trends more effectively: for example, “the chart illustrates,” “increased,” “fell,” and “export earnings.” Check spelling and use standard collocations for describing figures and percentage changes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
There are attempts at longer sentences and comparative structures, but control is inconsistent, and errors often obscure the intended meaning. For example, “at thr first glance, it can promptly noticed” lacks the required verb form, while “the value of petroleum productsions in 2016 in 2015 this figure elevated” has an unclear sentence structure and tense pattern. The opening also runs several clauses together without reliable punctuation, and the final fragment is not a complete sentence. These problems make it hard to identify which year each figure refers to. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add comparisons with accurate forms such as “rose from … to …” and “was lower than …”.
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