Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart below shows the value of one 's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. measurd in billions of dollars.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You identify two relevant overall features: petroleum products earned the most, and textiles had the largest increase; you also note that gems and jewellery declined. These observations match the visual. However, the response is incomplete and reports very little of the data: it gives no clear account of most categories or the comparison between the years, and the final sentence breaks off. The statement that petroleum products generated about $63 billion appears to give the 2016 figure, but the year is not specified. The required minimum of 150 words is not met: the response contains 70 words, with 17 copied from the prompt excluded. To improve, provide a complete overview and select key figures to compare across all categories.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening identifies the chart, followed by an overview beginning with “overall”. The main features are placed together, which gives the reader some sense of the intended focus. However, the response does not develop into clear, complete paragraphs, and the sequence of details is difficult to follow. The long run-on passage beginning “overall” combines the overview with figures and ends abruptly at “there were the most valuable export categories dur”. Connections between ideas are also unclear, particularly around the engineered-goods comparison. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and selected details, and make each sentence express one complete comparison.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “exports”, “categories”, “earned the highest amount”, “increase” and “decrease”. These choices show an attempt to describe trends rather than simply list labels. However, the range is limited, and several spelling errors make the report harder to understand, such as “measurd”, “jewellwery” and “approixmately”. Some phrasing is also imprecise: “earned the highest amount” could be expressed more naturally as “generated the highest export revenue”, while “increasing approximmately earn from goodrose” is unclear. Aim for accurate spelling and use precise terms such as “rose”, “fell”, “remained stable” and “export earnings” to describe the data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts a few sentence patterns, including a comparison with “while” and a past-tense statement about export earnings. However, grammatical control is weak and the limited range makes several relationships difficult to interpret. The opening is a sentence fragment: “measurd in billions of dollars” needs to be attached to the preceding sentence, for example, “measured in billions of dollars.” The long passage beginning “overall” lacks reliable sentence boundaries and punctuation, and the final clause is incomplete. There are also unclear verb constructions in “increasing approximmately earn from goodrose”. Practise writing short, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then use accurate punctuation to separate comparisons.
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