Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE AVAILABLE BAR CHART ILLUSTRATES THE PERCENTAGES ABOUT EXPORTATION OF FIVE DIFFERENT PRODUCTS IN BETWEEN 2015 AND 2016 .

AT FIRST 60 BILLION PETROLIUM PRODUCTS CHOOSE FOR EXPORT WHICH COUNTED ONLY 3 % OF EXPORT RATE IN CONTRAST TEXTILES PRODUCT ONLY 25 TO 32 BILLIONS MAKES THE HIGHIEST PORPORTION 15.24% OF OVERALL EXPORT .

ENGINEERED GOODS ,GEMS AND JEWELLERY COMPRISES OF 8.5% AND 5.18% OF OVERALL EXPORTATION WHILE AGRICULTRUAL ITEMS WERE LESS CONSIDERABLE FOR EXPORT PURPOSE ALL OVER THE TIME .

IN 2015 AND 2016 HIGHIEST VALUE 61 BILLIONS WERE COUNTED WHICH SLIGHTLY RISE,ON THE OTHER HAND ENGINEERED GOODS.JEWELLERY AND GEMS QUANTITY FLACTUTATES BETWEEN 40 TO 60 BILLIONS ,IN CONTRAST AGRICULTURAL EQUIPMENTS ,PRODUCTS AMOUNT REMAINS STABLE AT 31 TO 32 BILLIONS .A CLEAR SHIFT SEEMS TO THE IMPORT OF TEXILTIE GOODS 25 BILLION IN 2015 AND 32 BILLIONS IN 2016.

IN CONCLUSION TEXTILES EPORT RATE STAYED AT THE PEAKS IN BOTH YEARS INCONTRAST PETROLEUM GOODS CONSIDERED TO BE LESS EXPORTABLE.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant categories and include some figures, such as petroleum at about 61 billion and textiles rising from roughly 25 to 32 billion. However, the account does not clearly summarise the main pattern: petroleum was the highest-valued category in both years, while textiles had the largest percentage increase, not the highest export value. The conclusion reverses this distinction by saying textiles were “at the peaks” and petroleum was “less exportable.” You also describe the percentages as shares of overall exports, although the table gives percentage changes, and say gems and jewellery increased when its value actually fell. To improve, give an accurate overview first, then compare the key values and changes without adding unsupported interpretations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to organise information by category and year, so there is some basic structure. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the opening paragraph mixes export values with percentage changes, and the later paragraph repeats textiles and petroleum without clarifying how the comparisons relate. Connectors such as “at first,” “on the other hand,” and “in contrast” are used, but some do not express a clear or accurate relationship between the points. The conclusion also conflicts with the earlier figures. A clearer sequence would be an overview, followed by a paragraph comparing the leading categories and another describing the changes, with each comparison linked explicitly to the chart or table.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt task-related vocabulary, including “export rate,” “comprise,” “stable,” and “fluctuates,” and use some category names from the chart. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unclear: “products choose for export,” “highest proportion,” and “less exportable” do not describe the data precisely. Several spelling errors, including “petrolium,” “agricultrual,” and “texiltie,” also make the response harder to read. Use straightforward, accurate terms such as “export earnings,” “value,” “rose,” and “declined,” and distinguish a category’s value from its percentage change. This would make your vocabulary more reliable and appropriate for describing statistical information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to understand. For example, “60 billion petroleum products choose for export” lacks a clear subject and correctly formed verb, while “which counted only 3%” has an unclear reference. Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “Engineered goods, gems and jewellery comprises,” and punctuation is often missing or misplaced, especially around the category lists. Some basic meaning can still be recovered, but the range of accurate sentence patterns is limited. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, checking singular and plural agreement, and using punctuation to separate comparisons; then add more complex structures once these are secure.

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