Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

There is a graph shown the data which is collected during 2015 and 2016. The data shows that in 2015 the petrolume products are 60 and in2016 thpetrolume products category was about of 63.,so it shows that petrolume products are increased in 2016. Seconly graph shows the Engineered goods the graph shows the category of these goods in2015 was about of 57 .And in 2016 the Engineered goods was about of 61. So, changing in that year 2016 also increase. The graph shows category of Germs and Jwelery was about of 42 in 2015 and in 2016 it is about of 41.02. so its demand is decrease in 2016. Fourthy graph shows data of Agriculture products in 2015 it was about of 31 and in2016 it was about of 32.So it increase in 2016. Last graph shows information about of Textiles its categories in2015 was about of 15 and in 2016 it was about of 31. So it is increase was increase in 2016. Percentage of petrolume products is 3.And percentage of engineered things is 8.5.Percentage of

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant movements, including increases in petroleum, engineered goods and agricultural products, and a fall in gems and jewellery. However, the response mainly lists categories one by one rather than selecting and summarising the main features. It gives no clear overall overview, such as noting that petroleum remained the highest-earning category while textiles showed the strongest growth. Some figures are inaccurate: textiles began at about $26 billion, not $15 billion, and engineered goods reached about $62 billion rather than $61 billion. The final discussion of percentage changes is incomplete, ending at “Percentage of”. To improve, provide a concise overview and compare the largest values and most notable changes, using the table accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the chart categories in a recognisable order, and words such as “Secondly,” “Fourthy” and “Last” signal movement through the information. However, the writing is presented as one long sequence without clear paragraphing or a distinct overview, so the reader has difficulty seeing which features are most important. Repeated sentence openings such as “The graph shows” and repeated conclusions such as “So it increase” make the progression mechanical. Some links are unclear, particularly the shift from describing the chart to the unfinished percentage section. Group related information into an introduction, an overview and detail paragraphs, and use comparisons to connect categories rather than treating each as a separate item.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant terms, including “category,” “percentage” and “increased,” so the basic subject is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with “graph shows” and “about of” appearing repeatedly. Several spelling errors, including “petrolume,” “Seconly,” “Germs” and “Jwelery,” reduce clarity and accuracy. Some expressions are also unsuitable for describing chart data: “its demand is decrease” interprets export value as demand, which the visual does not establish. Build a more precise range for reporting figures and trends, such as “export earnings,” “rose to,” “declined slightly” and “accounted for,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to report past data and uses simple clauses that communicate some basic comparisons. However, sentence structures are very limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement and punctuation make the account difficult to follow. Examples include “the petrolume products are 60,” “its demand is decrease,” and “So it is increase was increase.” Several sentences run together or contain misplaced punctuation, as in “63.,so,” while forms such as “in2016” also show weak control of spacing and sentence boundaries. Practise accurate past-tense reporting (“earnings rose”), and vary simple sentences with controlled comparisons, for example, “Textile earnings rose from about $26 billion to $31.5 billion.”

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