Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This chart illustrates thats importance of one specfic country exports in numerous faces between the two differents time period.Whereas, the table shows the changing value of exports during two different times.

Overall, this picture clearly shows thats the ratio of pertroleum products during two different time period thats was at high level, and low ratio of textile during this same periods.

Firstly, the amount of petroleum produts was so hight about sixty dollars millions, during the two different time period.However, the ratio of engineered goods reached between upto fifty anf sixty billions, and gems and jewellery ratio hight approximately, fourty billions dollars, agriculture products upto 30 billions dollars.At the end the textile more between the 20 and 30 billions dollars.

secondly , percentage changing value of in these products, like in petroleum products was high and others products was high.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the broad subject and include an overview that petroleum exports were highest while textiles were among the lowest. However, the response only minimally reports the chart’s main features: it gives approximate figures for 2015 but does not clearly compare both years or explain the table’s percentage changes. The statement that petroleum was high and “others products was high” is too vague, and it misses the notable rise in textiles and the fall in gems and jewellery. There are also inaccuracies, such as describing textiles as low without noting their increase to about $31.5 billion. The response is 10 words below the required minimum. To improve, report the key comparisons across both years and accurately summarise the contrasting percentage trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and two body sections signalled by “Firstly” and “secondly.” This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is limited, and the second body section does not develop its stated focus: it lists no specific percentage changes and ends with the unclear claim that petroleum and other products were high. Connections between ideas are also sometimes awkward, as in “Whereas, the table shows…” and “However” before the engineered-goods figure. Use one paragraph to compare export values and another to summarise percentage changes, with clear links such as “by contrast” and “while.” This would make the organisation more purposeful and reduce the impression of disconnected statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “exports,” “percentage changing value,” and the product categories, so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “ratio” used where “value” or “earnings” is needed, and “high” repeated without precise comparisons. Several spelling and word-choice errors—such as “pertroleum,” “produts,” “hight,” and “different time period”—make the description less clear and strain the reader. Some phrases, including “numerous faces” and “reached between upto,” are not natural in this context. Build a small set of accurate chart-description terms, such as “rose,” “declined,” “remained stable,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few longer sentence forms, including the opening contrast with “Whereas” and the sentence beginning “However,” but control is weak and the range remains limited. Errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “the ratio of pertroleum products … thats was at high level” has faulty clause structure and agreement, while “the amount … was so hight … during the two different time period” contains problems with article use and singular/plural forms. Several sentences run together without spaces after full stops, and the final sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then combine them using “while” or “whereas”; check subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries.

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