Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

One of the most controversial issue about relates to environmental problam of our time is the loss of the particular species of plants and animals. In the essay we talk in main two points.

On one side arguments plants is importants in our society. Because we take fresh air and our environments looking more good. From my perspective is important our environments. We take fresh air and and look our area nice and neat and clean and also our looking greenry.

If our environments plants didn't produce So people didn't fresh air and don't any plants is big problams for our enviroments. So many places had these problams people didn't produce any plants and he loss our our time to takes fresh air and any animals take care some people saying is importants our life.

In our country places have people didn't produce any plants and on other side we look many place people produce any plants. In our people outside the home produce the plants and our home looking good we go our gardan take fresh air enjoy our time gardan. So from my perspective is important our life takes good enviroments and take fresh air its importants our life.

If we don't produce any plants so people didn't take fresh air and don't nore spend time in outside.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You express a view that plants and the environment matter, and you give a personal example about growing plants at home and enjoying a garden. However, the response does not adequately discuss both views in the question: it focuses almost entirely on plants and fresh air, without explaining the loss of animal species or presenting other environmental problems for comparison. The position is present but not clearly developed into an answer to the full prompt, and examples are repetitive rather than supported with specific reasons. The response is also 30 words below the required minimum. To improve, explain why species loss is serious, compare it with another problem such as climate change or pollution, and state clearly which you consider more important, with a developed example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response is divided into paragraphs and uses basic signposting such as “On one side” and “on other side,” so there is an attempt to organise ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs repeat the same points about plants, fresh air and attractive surroundings rather than developing distinct stages of an argument. The contrast between the two sides is not made clear, and several references, such as “these problems” and “our time,” do not identify precisely what they refer to. Some linking words are used mechanically, and the final sentence repeats an earlier point instead of concluding the discussion. Plan one paragraph for each view, followed by a clear opinion and conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “plants,” “animals,” “environment,” “fresh air” and “garden,” which makes the general topic recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, and several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, as in “our environments looking more good,” “produce any plants” and “our looking greenery.” There are also spelling errors such as “problam,” “enviroments” and “gardan.” These limitations reduce precision when you try to explain environmental impacts or compare problems. Build a topic vocabulary set for biodiversity, pollution and climate change, and practise accurate collocations such as “plant trees,” “lose species” and “protect natural habitats.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt simple statements and some longer sentences with “because” and “if,” showing an effort to connect ideas. However, sentence structures are mostly basic, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction are frequent. For example, “One of the most controversial issue” has a singular/plural mismatch, while “If our environments plants didn't produce” does not form a clear conditional sentence. In “we take fresh air and and look our area,” the sentence structure and coordination are also faulty. These errors often make the intended relationships difficult to understand. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build controlled clauses: for example, “If plants disappeared, people would have less clean air.” Check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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