Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Nowadays, certain individuals state that the extinction of specific species of animals and plants is the only pressing environmental issue. Others argue there exist several other crucial environmental challenges. In this essay I will discuss both these statements and give my own opinion.

To begin with, indeed, every species of plants and animals play a pivotal role in the whole ecosystem. Losing any species of them disturbs our environment which may has detrimental effects on our lives. Subsequently, some of the species are beneficial and cooperate in alleviating agricultural challenges such as sparrows hunt hazardous insects from crops which improve overall health of crops. Similarly, to illustrate, the reduction in the number of bees caused a significant issue in the United States because bees used to pollinate seeds but when the number reduced the United States had to invest a substantial amount of money for hiring labors and grow all the crops again.

Conversely, there are other environmental issues we are facing at the moment. One of the biggest issue is pollution. Traffic on roads and industries of vaious kinds are increasing day by day which still run on traditional fossil fuels. When they burn the fossil fuels they emit smoke in the air; consequently, a number of residents suffer from serious health problems such as asthma and cancer. Moreover, climate change is another debateable issue caused various by human activities. Weather patterns are deteriorating around the globe and substantially affecting the agricultural sector. For instance, the annual output of the wheat crop in Pakistan dropped dramatically and now the government imports it which requires a significant amount of money.

In conclusion, from my perspective, other environmental problems such as pollution, climate change are concerning issues because we all, including plants and animals suffer badly from these challenges. Some species are vulnerable to climate changes so when any alteration happens they become extinct. These issues cause the countries to invest and conduct an extensive research for addressing these issues.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for broader environmental problems, especially pollution and climate change. The examples about bees and crop pollination, pollution-related illness, and wheat production in Pakistan make the discussion relevant and show an effort to support your points. The response also links species loss to wider ecosystem effects. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the species-loss argument relies mainly on one example, and the bee example’s consequences are not explained precisely. Your own position is clearest in the conclusion, but could be established more firmly in the introduction and carried through the discussion. More explanation of why pollution or climate change is more urgent overall would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The progression from species loss to other environmental challenges is easy to follow, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Conversely,” and “In conclusion” help guide the reader. Examples are generally placed alongside the points they support. Some linking is less smooth or precise, however. “Similarly, to illustrate” repeats the same function, while “Subsequently” does not clearly express the relationship between species loss and the example that follows. The conclusion also introduces the idea of research and investment without developing it earlier. Use fewer formulaic transitions and make the logical links between claims and examples more explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “pivotal role,” “detrimental effects,” “fossil fuels,” “pollinate,” and “agricultural sector.” These choices help you discuss both biodiversity and wider environmental concerns, and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “substantial amount” and “conduct an extensive research,” though some combinations are inaccurate or unnatural. “Debateable” is misspelled, and “vaious” contains a spelling error; “labors” is also not the natural term in the context of hiring workers. Aim for more precise collocations and check spelling, while avoiding overly elaborate phrases when a simpler, accurate expression would be clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “because,” “when,” and “which,” and most ideas remain understandable. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly with agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “every species … play” should use a singular verb, and “which may has” should be “which may have.” In “climate change is another debateable issue caused various by human activities,” the clause is not grammatically formed; a clearer version would be “climate change is another issue caused by various human activities.” There are also awkward constructions such as “the reduction … caused a significant issue.” Review subject–verb agreement and modal verb patterns, and proofread complex sentences to ensure each clause is complete.

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