Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The issue of main invironmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals is widely discussed nowadays. Some people believe that it is main problem in our time. while others argue that environmental problems loss of particular species of plant.
On the one hand, the loss of particular species can have devastating consequences for the natural environment. Every plant and animal plays an important role in maintaining the ecological balance. For example, bees are essential for pollination, which allows many plants and crops to reproduce. If these species disappear, food production could be affected significantly. Furthermore, the extinction of animals can disrupt food chains and threaten the survival of other species. Therefore, protecting biodiversity is essential for maintaining a healthy ecosystem.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response gives a relevant explanation of why species loss matters, especially through the examples of bees’ role in pollination and the disruption of food chains. However, it does not discuss the opposing view that other environmental problems are more important, and it gives no clear personal opinion comparing the two positions. The opening also repeats the task’s topic without establishing a developed argument. The authoritative length check confirms that the response is 113 words, 137 words below the 250-word minimum; this leaves too little space to address all parts of the task. To improve, explain at least one competing problem, such as climate change or pollution, state which concern you consider more serious, and support that judgement with relevant reasons and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a recognisable structure: an opening paragraph is followed by a body paragraph, and the latter develops a sequence from ecological balance to pollination, food production and food chains. Linking phrases such as “On the one hand,” “For example,” and “Furthermore” help signal these relationships. However, there is no corresponding discussion of the other view or concluding paragraph, so the overall progression is incomplete. The opening is also difficult to follow because it repeats the topic and then presents an unclear contrast. Build a clear paragraph plan: introduce both views and your position, discuss each view in a separate paragraph, and conclude by restating your judgement. Use linking expressions to show the argument’s logic rather than relying mainly on a list of points.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The response uses several relevant topic terms, including “ecological balance,” “pollination,” “food production,” “food chains,” and “biodiversity.” These choices communicate the central point about the effects of species loss, and “devastating consequences” adds emphasis. However, the range is narrow because the response develops only one side of the topic, and some wording is inaccurate or repetitive. For instance, “invironmental” is misspelled, while “the loss of particular species of plant” is an unclear and incomplete expression in the opening. Aim for accurate, varied language for both sides of the discussion, such as “habitat destruction,” “climate change,” and “pose a greater threat.” Check spelling and use precise phrases rather than repeating the task wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response includes some well-controlled complex sentences, particularly “If these species disappear, food production could be affected significantly,” which uses a conditional structure effectively. The sentences explaining pollination and ecological consequences are generally clear. However, the opening contains sentence-boundary and punctuation problems: “nowadays. Some people” begins a new sentence with a lowercase “while” later, and the first sentence combines ideas in a confusing way. The phrase “it is main problem” also lacks an article, and “environmental problems loss of particular species” has an incomplete grammatical relationship between its ideas. Use complete, clearly separated sentences, check articles such as “the main problem,” and vary sentence structures while maintaining accurate punctuation.
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