Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is ongoing debate as some people believe the main enviornmetal issue of our time is extinction of some specie of plant and animals whike other say that there are more imprtant enviormentak problems I truky believe that there are more important enviormental probmem like polution

On the one hand some people argue that loss of speice ua main issue to some extent I agree with this point of view because it brek food chain and disturb our ecosystem for example if bees are remove from our ecosystem it directly effect our plant growth Also removal of forest or trees for building are causing loss of different specie of plants or herbs which is used in medicine ao in return it cause loss of medicine from plant or as we know if some species are extinct from our enviornment and never came back for example neem trees in pakistan is use for skin diseases and infections if neem disappear we lose a natural medicine or another example of extinct specie is doddo bird lived in mauratitus human hunted it and baecame extinct

on the other hand more important problems are climate changes which cause floods and hear for example In pakistan there is drastic change in climate which which is main cause of unseasnol rains and cause flood in 2022 or the other major problem is pollution as we know now a day there is increase in use of vechile which nit only cause air pollution also the main cause of noice pollution or the other cause of pollution

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your opinion in the opening, identifying pollution and climate change as more important concerns. The discussion of species loss includes relevant points about food chains, bees, medicinal plants and the dodo, while the Pakistan flood example supports your discussion of climate change. However, the ideas are often asserted rather than explained: the neem example, for instance, does not clearly establish that the species is endangered or connect its loss to the wider argument. The second view is also less fully developed, and the response ends without a concluding summary of your position. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and a specific, accurate example, then restate your judgement in a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction followed by paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “on the other hand.” These signals help readers identify the two perspectives, and examples are generally placed alongside the point they support. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sequences. The first body paragraph moves from bees to forest removal, neem and the dodo without clearly showing how each example advances the argument. The final paragraph also introduces pollution but does not complete or organise that discussion. Use one central idea per paragraph, divide explanations into clear sentences, and add a conclusion. More precise linking and referencing would make the relationships between claims easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “ecosystem,” “food chain,” “climate changes,” “air pollution” and “noise pollution,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “medicinal” plants and “unseasonal rains.” However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand, including “enviornmetal,” “speice,” “vechile” and “hear” where “heat” appears intended. Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “loss of medicine from plant.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and choosing standard collocations, for example “medicinal plants” and “vehicle emissions.” Reusing a smaller set of accurate environmental terms is more effective than attempting uncertain forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express causes, effects and examples, including a conditional structure in “if bees are remove from our ecosystem it directly effect our plant growth.” This shows an effort to connect ideas in more than simple statements. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning harder to follow. For example, “it directly effect” needs subject–verb agreement, while “dodo bird lived in mauritius human hunted it” combines clauses without clear punctuation or grammatical links. Many sentences run together, and the response shows limited control of varied structures. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using clauses such as “because” and “which.” Check verb forms and agreement during revision.

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