Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss particular species of plants and animals. But some people say that there are more important environmental problems. The loss of plants and animals are badly effect on our environment that cause a serious problems. When plants and animals decrease it may effect our environment.

I strongly believe that if plants and animals are killed it may cause a mojar bad effect on our surroundings and nation . But so ome people say the main problem is environmental. If plants and trees are killed it badly effect on weather. Because plants and trees take a important role to maintain our atmosphere.

Today life trees and animals were play a important role to fulfill their need by plants and trees we get fruits and vagetables that we use in our daily life on the other way by animals we get work and meet. In this way both trees and animals took a main role in our daily life.

When trees become decrease the weather are badly effect in this way heat increase. If the trees are increase it may cause a good effect on weather heat is less in atmosphere and Sweather become good. In this way animals are also good effect on our environment. By loss of plants and trees are badly effect our ecosystem that cause many problems and diseases.So we protect plants and animals to improve our atmosphere and decrease the environmental problems. The only way to improve our atmosphere

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You address the topic of species loss and state a position—“I strongly believe” that harm to plants and animals affects the environment—but the response does not adequately discuss both views. Most of the essay explains why plants and animals matter; the view that other environmental problems may be more important is only briefly mentioned and never explained or compared. Examples such as trees affecting heat and plants providing food are relevant, but they are repeated and not developed into clear reasons. The conclusion is also incomplete (“The only way to improve our atmosphere”). The response is 233 words, below the required 250; 22 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To improve, explain at least one alternative environmental problem and support your opinion with developed examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some paragraphing, and the response generally stays on the environmental topic. However, ideas are not arranged in a clear progression: the opening repeats the two positions, while later paragraphs return several times to the effects of losing trees without building a distinct argument. Connectors such as “But,” “In this way,” and “Because” are used, but they do not consistently show how ideas relate; for example, “But so ome people say the main problem is environmental” does not clearly introduce a contrasting view. The final sentence is unfinished, which weakens the ending. Plan separate paragraphs for the two views and your opinion, then use clear topic sentences and links to guide the reader through them.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic and often repetitive, with frequent reliance on “plants and animals,” “effect,” “environment,” and “good.” Some topic-relevant terms, including “atmosphere” and “ecosystem,” show an attempt to use environmental vocabulary, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear. For instance, “plants and animals are badly effect on our environment” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “we get work and meet” is difficult to understand. Spelling errors such as “mojar,” “vagetables,” and “Sweather” also reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases—such as “biodiversity loss,” “habitat destruction,” and “climate change”—and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on simple sentences and shows limited control of basic sentence patterns. Errors occur frequently in agreement and verb forms: “The loss of plants and animals are,” “weather are badly effect,” and “animals were play” do not form accurate clauses. Articles and sentence construction are also problematic, as in “take a important role” and “By loss of plants and trees are badly effect our ecosystem.” Some meaning can still be inferred, but these errors sometimes make the intended relationship unclear. There are attempts to use subordinate clauses with “when,” “if,” and “because,” which is a useful starting point. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and complete clause patterns, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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