Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

IN THE MODERN ERA, ECOSYSTEM PLAYS A ESSENTIAL ROLE IN HUMAN BEINGS LIFE. NOWADAYS ENVIRONMENT ISSUES HAS RISEN ALL OVER THE GLOBE. IT IS OFTEN ARGUED THAT A FEW INDIVIDUALS THINK THE MAIN EVIRONMENT PROBLEM OF OUR TIME IS THE LOSS OF PARTICULAR SPECIES OF PLANTS AND ANIMALS, WHILE OTHERS OPINE THAT THERE ARE MORE IMPORTANT MAJOR PROBLEMS. THE MAIN POINTS WILL BE DISCUSSED IN THE UPCOMING PARAGRAPH AND LOGICAL CONCLUSION AT THE END.

ON THE ONE HAND, SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT DUE ENVIRONMENT PROBLEM THERE IS DECLINED IN ANIMALS AND SPECIES BECAUSE DUE TO DEFORESTATION . NOWDAYS MOST OF PEOPLE CAN CUT MANY TRESS FOR CONSTRUCT NEW BUILDINGS. MANY ANIMALS DONOT HAVE SHELTER, FOOD AND OTHERS MANY THINGS. FOR INSTANCE IN 2024 ABOUT 50% SPECIES WERE DIED . AS A RESULT IT IS NOT BENEFICIAL FOR ECOSYSTEM BECAUSE ANIMALS MAINTAIN THE BALANCE THE ENVIRONMENT. ANOTHER REASON IS THAT DUE TO HUNTING . MOST OF PEOPLE CAN HUNT THE ANIMALS FOR SELLING THEIR BODY PARTS SUCH AS SKIN , HORNS. THEREFORE , MANY SPECIES WILL DECLINE WITH THE ENVIRONMENT ISSUES.

ON THE OTHER HAND , OTHERS OPINE THAT THERE ARE OTHER MANY THINGS ARE RESPONSIBLE FOR ECOSYSTEM PROBLEM . THE MAIN REASON THAT WITH THE INDUSTRIES . MANY INDUSTRIES SECTOR CAUSE AIR POLLUTION AND ALSO EFFECT THE RIVERS , PONDS. IN THE OTHER TERM, THESE INDUSTRIES SPREAD A LOT HARMFUL CHEMICAL IN AWTER WHICH CAN INCREASE BACTERIA INSIDE THE WATER . HENCE , THIS WATER IS EASILY CONSUMED BY ANIMALS AND BIRDS AND THEY REMAIN DEAD . SECONDLY, WITH THE INCREASE OF TRANSPORTATION SUCH aS CARS , BUSES. THESE VEHICLES CAN RELEASED HARMFUL AIR AND EFFECT THE ENVIRONMENT.

IN THE CONCLUSION, I HAVE DISCUSSED THE MAIN POINTS IN ABOVE PARAGRAPHS WITH MY PERSONAL IDEAS. I BELIEVED THAT TRANSPORTATION AND INDUSTRIES SECTORS SHOULD EFFECT THE ECOSYSTEM. IN OPINION , ANIMALS SHOULD BALANCED THE EVIRONMENT AND FOOD CHAIN . species also transfer pollen between flowers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: the first body paragraph discusses species loss through deforestation and hunting, while the second presents industrial pollution and transport as wider environmental problems. Your conclusion also indicates a preference for the latter concerns. However, the position is not fully clear or consistently explained: the opening promises a discussion but gives no view, and the conclusion says industries and transportation “should effect the ecosystem,” which does not clearly express why these are more important. Several claims, such as “about 50% species were died,” are unsupported or unclear, and the point about pollen appears only at the end. Develop fewer ideas with accurate examples and explain their significance to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In the conclusion” help readers identify the sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first paragraph moves from deforestation to an unclear statistic and then hunting, while the second shifts from water pollution to transport without explaining the relationship between these points. Connect each claim to its consequence and use clearer referencing. The conclusion mostly repeats that points were discussed rather than synthesising them, and the final sentence about pollen feels disconnected from the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant environmental vocabulary, including “deforestation,” “air pollution,” “harmful chemical,” “food chain,” and “ecosystem.” This gives the response a basic range suited to the topic. However, word choice, collocation, and spelling errors are frequent enough to make some ideas unclear, as in “environment issues,” “industries sector,” “spread a lot harmful chemical,” and “species were died.” There are also repeated general terms such as “problem” and “many things,” where more precise language would strengthen the discussion. Check spelling carefully (“environment,” “water,” “trees”) and learn common topic collocations, such as “species decline” and “industrial waste,” so your meaning is more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use both simple statements and longer cause-and-effect sentences, for example, “Many animals donot have shelter, food and others many things” and the sentence beginning “These industries spread…”. However, the range is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. Frequent problems with articles, agreement, verb forms, and sentence construction make parts difficult to understand: “Ecosystem plays a essential role,” “environment issues has risen,” and “these vehicles can released harmful air.” Some sentences are fragments, including “Another reason is that due to hunting.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb forms before adding longer clauses. More accurate basic structures will make your ideas easier to follow.

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