Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

At presents environment is faced various kind of damage and along with time it is loss vast number of species.some argu with tand and say except lossing animale and plants there are other problems which are more crucial rather than 1st one.

First of all, because of natural damage and climate change many species lost their havitant and bio-diversity.After few decades they will loss their existance.Nowadays, the rate of pollution increased rapidly because of this natural change grobal worming also rised and it causes ice melting.It is theartning for not only aminals who live in surface but also sea animale too.For an example,from reachers of Biology scientist the number of special varaity of shark decline day by day because of grobal climate change they also shared that the decline was noticed at forest amimals.The loss also seen in the number of tree.

On the contary, environmental cricis has a crucial inpact on human too.Because of pollution in air,soil,water and other ingrident of nature causes various deases and people have to face diffrent kind of helth condition.Natural environment is very nessesary for every individuals to keep out mind fresh and active but recently the environment faces many problem like carbon emmusion, damage of ozon stage of air.Now people cut down tree for constraction which is very significant elimant of nature.Lossing the proportion of tree we will face other natural damage.

From my point of view agree with 2nd starement.Because it is more relavent than 1 st one.We have to take care of our envioronment properly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views: the first body paragraph links species loss to habitat damage and climate change, while the next discusses pollution, human health, and tree cutting. Your final sentence gives a preference for the view that other environmental problems are more important. However, the position is not fully clear or supported: the opening is difficult to interpret, and the conclusion says the second view is “more relevant” without explaining why it outweighs species loss. Several points, such as pollution-related diseases and shark decline, are introduced but not developed with clear explanations or examples. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of each problem and make a direct comparison that supports your opinion throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting the views, and a concluding opinion. Phrases such as “First of all” and “On the contrary” help signal the shift between paragraphs. However, progression within the paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first moves from habitat loss to pollution, global warming, sharks, forest animals, and trees without clearly showing how each point connects. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “this natural change” are unclear. The conclusion is also very brief and does not draw together the discussion. Group related ideas, use clearer cause-and-effect links, and make each paragraph develop one central point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-specific vocabulary, including “biodiversity,” “pollution,” “climate change,” “carbon emission,” and “ozone layer,” which is appropriate for the subject. There is also some effort to vary expression through phrases such as “crucial impact” and “natural environment.” However, spelling errors and inaccurate word choices are frequent and sometimes make meaning difficult to understand, as in “grobal worming,” “theartning,” and “reachers of Biology scientist.” Several phrases are also unnatural, including “lossing the proportion of tree” and “keep out mind fresh.” Work on accurate spelling and common collocations, and choose simpler wording when unsure; this will make your ideas clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including cause-and-effect structures such as “because of pollution … causes various diseases” and a relative clause in “animals who live in surface.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, articles, and agreement can make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “environment is faced various kind of damage” lacks a correct verb pattern, while “many species lost their havitant” needs a clearer tense and sentence construction. Punctuation and spacing also make some sentences run together. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for tense, articles, and agreement.

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