Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few individuals believe that the major environmental obstacle of time is the reduction of particular species of plants and animals. Others consider that there are numerous essential environmental troubles. Although deplection of plants and animals create problems, I believe that there also many troubles of this is global warming and pollution.

On the one hand, one of the major reason why some masses holds this viewpoint is disturbance of ecocystem. This is due ecological balance is not maintained if all the plants and animals species are reduced and it effect on food chain by which it cause various environmental problems like deplection of resources and fossil fuel. It not only effect on biodiversity but also on natural habitats. For instance, majority of people cut forests to build up new houses and factories by which tigers, elephants and deers loss their natural habitats. Thus, there pollution was decresed and disturb ecosystem.

On the other hand, I believe that there are many things which cause environmental problems such as pollution. This means that increasing the usage of private vehicles can cause alot of pollution in air which leads various health or environmental obstacles in the society and majority of factories dump up their waste materials to oceans which effect on marine life. Another reason given by this is global warming To elaborate, if there are a excessive use of electricity, car emisions and deforestation may cause environmental problems because it contribute climate conditions.

To conclude, even though by reducation of plants and animals species may cause various issues, I believe that global warming and pollution trigger the major problems.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your position: the opening acknowledges species loss, while the conclusion identifies global warming and pollution as the more serious problems. The examples of habitat loss and factory waste are relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The explanation that species decline disrupts the food chain is difficult to follow, and the claim that forest clearing means “there pollution was decresed” appears to contradict your point or is not explained. Your reasons for prioritising pollution and global warming are also asserted more than explored. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of each problem more clearly and compare why your chosen issues have wider or more serious effects.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help signal this organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, the sentence about ecological balance moves from species decline to fossil fuels without showing the connection, while “Thus” introduces a conclusion that is hard to interpret. The second body paragraph also shifts from vehicle emissions to factory waste and then global warming without a clear comparison. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, and connect each example explicitly to the argument it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “ecological balance,” “biodiversity,” “natural habitats,” and “marine life.” These choices show some range beyond basic environmental terms. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “problems” and “things,” and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make meaning less clear, including “deplection,” “ecocystem,” and “obstacles” where “issues” or “challenges” would fit better. Some collocations are also unnatural, such as “dump up their waste materials” and “car emisions.” Build precision by learning common environmental collocations and checking spelling; this will help your ideas sound clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “if,” “which,” and “because.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to understand. For example, “Although deplection … create problems, I believe that there also many troubles” has problems with agreement and a missing verb, while “it effect on food chain by which it cause” contains several errors in verb forms and sentence construction. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “a excessive use” and “all the plants and animals species.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly connected subordinate clause, then check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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