Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people says that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. But,I think that animals and plants are important for our environment because through plants we can take oxygen plants consume carbondioxode which is harmful for human health if there were no plant and trees then we have to face too many problems in breathing and inhaling and also plants consume that harmful gasses which is danger for human health, So I think that plant is more helpful for our life it is an impotant thing for our life. On the other hand animals are also important for our life beacuse we do not have knowledege that but there are few animals which is very hlelpful for our life.

They eat those insects,animals and etc which is harmful for our life. And through animal we can get meat from goat,sheep etc like this animal we can get meat for eating. Animal is also to much beautiful they also have to much specifications through female goat we can also get milk and through bufflow we can also get a healthy milk for our protein and well groth purpose. On the other hand there is an also an danger type of animal which are wild like tiger,chettah,gorilla, etc they are too many animals which are wild. So we have want to take space from those animal which are wild those which we cannot adpot them in our home beacuse there are wild animal. So, I think that animals and plants are imported fir our environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response gives a view that plants and animals are important, and it offers relevant points about oxygen, harmful insects, food and milk. However, it does not adequately discuss the other view in the prompt: that environmental problems other than species loss may be more important. Instead, most of the essay explains why plants and animals are useful to people, so the central comparison and the writer’s opinion about which problem is more serious remain unclear. Examples such as goats providing meat and milk are relevant to usefulness, but do not explain the consequences of species loss or compare it with another environmental threat. The response is also 245 words, five words below the 250-word minimum; the 18 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop both sides and state a direct, supported position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some basic organisation: the response begins with plants and then moves to animals, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “So, I think” signal transitions. However, these transitions do not consistently show the relationship between ideas. “On the other hand” introduces more examples of animal usefulness rather than a contrasting environmental view, and the essay has no clear paragraph structure to separate its main points. Several ideas are joined into long sequences, making the progression difficult to follow, while the conclusion repeats that plants and animals are important without resolving the task’s comparison. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and connect examples explicitly to the point they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “oxygen,” “carbon dioxide,” “harmful gases,” “wild” and “environment.” These words help communicate the general subject, but vocabulary is often repetitive and imprecise: “important” and “helpful” recur, while “specifications” does not clearly express the intended meaning. There are also frequent spelling and word-form problems, such as “carbondioxode,” “beacuse,” “impotant” and “imported,” which appears to be intended as “important.” Some phrases are awkward or unclear, including “take space from those animal” and “healthy milk for our protein.” Build a more precise environmental vocabulary and check spelling and collocations so that examples are easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences using “because,” “if” and “which,” showing an effort to connect reasons and details. However, sentence structures are often poorly controlled, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and punctuation frequently make the writing difficult to follow. For example, “Some people says” should be “Some people say,” and “there are few animals which is” needs plural agreement. The conditional “if there were no plant and trees then we have to face” also shifts awkwardly between verb forms and number. Run-on sentences, such as the opening explanation about plants, need to be divided and punctuated. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement and tense consistency.

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