Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The environmental problem is due to excessive loss of some plants and animals that is important for ecosystem, or it may lead by other factor. It is important to discuss both views. In this essay I will explain both point and give my opinion.

First of all, some species of plants and animals are very crucial part of environment. For example, all types of plants provide oxygen to humans that they use in breathing. Plants also increase greenery and reduce air pollution. Moreover, it also has advantages avoiding natural disastor like heavy strome and flooding. In the same way, animals provide some benefits to nature like mushrooms are meal for marine habitat.

On the other hand, some other factors are also playing important role in helping and protecting ecosystem. By reducing the things that are responsible for damaging nature, we can protect our habitat. For instance, strict action against vehicles and factories that are responsible for air as well as water pollution by burning fossile fuels and drainage of wastes into water bodies, are essential steps for surrounding.

In my opinion, both play vital role in protecting environment and reducing environmental problems. Living organism like plants, animals and humans all are very essential for surrounding.

In conclusion, loss of plants and animals can lead environmental problem also human activities like dirty water and smoke from vehicles and industries containing harmful gases, result in many types of pollution. By focusing on both these points, we can limit the problems that causing environmental demage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state an opinion that both species loss and human-caused pollution matter. The examples about plants producing oxygen and pollution from vehicles and factories are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the first view is supported with several claims, while the second is mainly a list of pollution sources and proposed action. The example that “mushrooms are meal for marine habitat” is unclear and does not convincingly explain the importance of animal species. Your opinion that both issues matter is present, but it would be stronger if you explained which environmental problem you consider more serious, or how the two views are connected. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and a specific, accurate example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “First of all,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the broad direction. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical, and some links between ideas are unclear. For example, “Moreover, it also has advantages avoiding natural disastor” does not clearly show how the point follows from plants providing oxygen and reducing pollution. The conclusion largely repeats earlier points rather than drawing them together. Use clearer references and explain the relationship between each supporting idea; also consider combining your opinion with the discussion so it develops naturally rather than appearing as a brief separate paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “ecosystem,” “air pollution,” “fossile fuels,” and “water bodies,” and these terms help establish the environmental focus. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural choices make parts of the argument difficult to understand. “Mushrooms are meal for marine habitat” appears to confuse the role of species, while “for surrounding” and “environmental demage” are not appropriate expressions in context. Spelling errors such as “disastor,” “strome,” and “fossile” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of environmental collocations and check spelling, word forms, and meaning. For instance, use established phrases such as “biodiversity loss,” “habitats,” and “industrial emissions” where they accurately express your point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer structures, including the sentence beginning “By reducing the things that are responsible for damaging nature,” and you use basic sentence patterns to communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and agreement occur often enough to affect clarity. Examples include “some species … that is important,” “it may lead by other factor,” and “both play vital role”; these need more accurate agreement and verb patterns. The sentence about vehicles and factories also has a confusing structure, with the subject and verb relationship obscured. Practise building accurate complex sentences with clear subjects and clauses, and check articles, plurals, and verb forms. Shorter, well-controlled sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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