Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is no denying the fact that our environment has several problems. While it is a commonly held belief that the major problem of our time is the loss of different species of plants and animals. There another point of view which believes that there are more important environmental problems such as air pollution. This essay will discuss both points of views and express my opinion.

On the one hand, the main argument that supports the first point of view is that nowdays several species of plants and animals have been lost. In other words, forests are close to be cleaned up due to fire that appeared recently especially in summer where we lost different species such as trees and animals that lives in forests. For example, too many monkeys were dead because of the fire that appeard in different forests of bejaia in the last summer. In addition, oils and fuels of boats in oceans may also affect negatively the marinelife, where several ocean species such as fish will be poisened.

On the other hand, air pollution is the major important problem for other people. It is also possible to say that, the human has a large impact in pollution of our environment. People invented different cars that consume fuel, gas that affects negatively the environment air. Moreover, the toxic air of different agences may also affect negatively the environment. As a result, the human life will be in danger because of different illnesses and deseases made by polluted air.

In conclusion, despite the loss of particular species of plants and animals.In my view I believe that the human is the main problem that affects the environment negatively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views by discussing species loss and air pollution, and you give a personal position in the conclusion: “the human is the main problem.” However, the position is not fully clear because this statement does not explain whether you consider air pollution more serious than species loss, or how human activity relates to both. The supporting ideas are relevant but limited and under-developed. The forest-fire and boat-fuel examples illustrate harm to wildlife, while the air-pollution paragraph mentions cars and illnesses, but the effects and relative importance of these problems are not explained in depth. To strengthen the response, state your comparison clearly and develop each main point with a specific cause-and-effect explanation. The response meets the stated length requirement; 17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in viewpoint, and the examples generally appear beside the ideas they support. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear or repetitive. For instance, “In other words” introduces an example rather than a restatement, and “where” is used to connect ideas in ways that make the relationships difficult to follow. The conclusion also begins with an incomplete contrast and runs the two sentences together. Use linking expressions only when their meaning fits, make references explicit, and ensure each paragraph develops one central point in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “species,” “forests,” “fuel,” “toxic air,” and “illnesses.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “marinelife” and “poisoned.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling or word-choice errors distract the reader: “nowdays,” “appeard,” “poisened,” “agences,” and “deseases.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “forests are close to be cleaned up” and “the major important problem.” Choose precise environmental terms and check spelling carefully. For example, describe forests as “destroyed by wildfires” and say that air pollution “poses a serious threat” rather than using awkward or repetitive phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrastive opening with “While” and a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “As a result.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships harder to understand. Examples include “There another point of view,” which needs a verb, “species … that lives,” where the verb does not agree with the plural noun, and “forests are close to be cleaned up,” which has an incorrect construction. The conclusion also has a punctuation problem: “animals.In my view” needs a space and clearer sentence structure. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, and sentence boundaries, then proofread each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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