Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.
In my opinion, the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. by the time now the particular species of plants and animals are now extent from the world. Its very concerning and alarming situation.
There are many other environmental problems exist in the world like pollution is one of the environmental problem that causes different disease. There are different types of pollution like water pollution, air pollution, noise pollution. they are caused by different factors including increasing the traffic on the roads,smoke releasing from the industries ,solid waste discarding from the industries. its very concerning issue now a days. The main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. As it is very important If birds got extended the the insects become more on the earth as they are food of the birds. Vise versa if insects become extended then the birds that requires food is not completed. On the other hand if plants become finished from the planet than the animals that eat greenery that are called herbivorous can also be extended from the planet.
The main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Lets overview on another example that if animals become extended the life cycle is disturbed.
The main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Other environmental problem are also concerned but the loss of particular species of plants and animals is most concerning issue now a days.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views and providing an opinion. However, the development of ideas is significantly hampered by excessive repetition. The phrase 'the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species' is repeated verbatim five times, which prevents the essay from exploring the topic in depth. While the student attempts to explain the consequences of species loss (e.g., the impact on food chains), the arguments are underdeveloped and circular. The response lacks a clear structure, and the opinion is not supported by a well-reasoned argument, leading to a limited exploration of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a logical flow. Paragraphing is used, but the content within the paragraphs is repetitive and lacks progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'The main environmental problem...' to start new sections. There is no clear transition between the discussion of pollution and the discussion of species loss. The referencing is often unclear, and the overall arrangement of ideas feels mechanical and disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's line of reasoning.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. The student frequently uses the word 'extended' when they clearly mean 'extinct' or 'extinction', which is a significant error in word choice that impacts meaning. Other phrases like 'very concerning and alarming situation' are used in a repetitive manner. There is a lack of variety in the language used to discuss environmental issues, and the student struggles to express complex ideas due to a limited range of vocabulary. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning topic-specific collocations and synonyms for common words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'insects become more'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'extended' instead of 'extinct'), and awkward sentence structures. Punctuation is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar—such as articles, pluralization, and verb tense—prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. The writing relies heavily on simple sentences that are often grammatically flawed.
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