Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, the environmental problems have been increased rapidly, , a group of people claim that the significant problem of their time is the loss of particular species of flora and fauna. On the other hand, some people counter and think other than loss of species there are more critical environment problems like pollution, deforestation, and many other, both the views and my opinion will be discussed further in the ensuing paragraphs.

Examining the first viewpoint, some individuals argue that in the past specific species of flora and fauna have been extinct, there are many reasons behind it, the most significant one is due to increasing in urbanization and population the forests are directly converted in grounds for different uses, like for agriculture, infrastructure, industries and many other uses, by clearing the forest lots of species of plants and animals becomes extinct from the world. and whole ecosystem becomes imbalanced dur to loss of certain species from the world.

In contrast, other persons counter claim that view, and argue that there are more major factors of environmental problem other than loss of species which directly influence human, day by day as industries are increasing, the hazardous waste and gases are causing more damage to environment, they are directly discarding liquid waste into water bodies. Additionally, gases generated form factories are directly damaging ozone layer and causing global warming.

To conclude, Although, some believe that particular species of flora and fauna had extinct is the only one maim concern of environmental problem I believe there are also many other major problems of due to which environment affects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both viewpoints and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention deforestation and pollution, the arguments lack depth and specific examples to support your claims. The conclusion is quite brief and does not effectively synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, ensure that each body paragraph provides a clear, well-supported argument rather than just listing general points. The position is clear, but the overall development is somewhat superficial, which limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is often hindered by mechanical and repetitive transitions. You use phrases like 'In contrast' and 'To conclude', but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak. Many sentences are run-on or comma-spliced, such as 'In recent years, the environmental problems have been increased rapidly, , a group of people claim...', which disrupts the logical progression of ideas. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of varied cohesive devices makes the writing feel disjointed. Improving sentence structure and using a wider range of linking words would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'environmental problems', 'major factors', and 'good/bad' concepts. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'the environmental problems have been increased' (should be 'have increased') and 'had extinct' (should be 'have become extinct'). To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to environmental science and use collocations more accurately. Avoid repetitive phrasing and focus on using precise terminology to express your ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are significant issues with sentence construction, including comma splices and run-on sentences. For example, '...the most significant one is due to increasing in urbanization and population the forests are directly converted in grounds...' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. Verb tense usage is inconsistent, and there are errors in article usage and prepositional phrases. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. Focus on mastering basic sentence structure—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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