Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is undeniable that nowadays environmental problem become a pensive concern . In this regard some people think that the main environmental problems of our time is loss of particular species of plants and animals while other believe that there are more important environmental problems . This essay will outline not only both perspectives but also my opinion for regarding former point of view which will outline in forthcoming fragment with logical conclusion .

To commence with ,there are several point for former point of view .Firstly it may effect the food chain .To explain it that in our ecosystem every plant and animals play an important role all species are dependent on each other for food . As any species may damage then it will effect on our ecosystem .For example in case bees will disappear from ecosystem then plant pollination affected because bees helps many plant to pollinate . Secondly it may cause damage to environment and increase many problems . To clarify it that many plants and animals helps to protect the environment in different ways . As trees helps to make a soil in tight condition in case tree may deforested day by day then many land degradation or land escaping problems rise . Therefore species are damaged by any reason it also effect on human population .

However , there are few point for latter point of view .First and foremost are may affect on climate . To justify it that problems created in environment may cause as change in climate nowadays global warming increase due to problems in environment and temperature rise day by day and ozone layer may damaged then may cause skin problems for humans . Moreover it may cause rise in pollution to eloborate it that pollution are become a pensive concern . They may cause many problems by drinking polluted water may cause many allergies or by breathing polluted air may effect the lungs and cause many lungs problems .

In conclusion although there are few point in latter point of few such as bad health conditions and climate changes . Yet according to me importance of former point can never be neglected at any cost .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the explanation of the food chain is repetitive, and the discussion of 'other' environmental problems is vague, focusing on general pollution rather than specific, competing environmental crises. The position is stated in the introduction but remains underdeveloped in the body paragraphs, lacking a clear, nuanced justification for why biodiversity loss should be considered the primary concern. To improve, ensure that each point is supported by more specific, logical reasoning rather than general statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To explain it that' and 'To clarify it that' are non-standard and awkward. Additionally, the transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the arguments and the conclusion is weak. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow of the essay.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several instances of inappropriate word choice. For example, the word 'pensive' is used incorrectly to mean 'pressing' or 'serious'. There are also issues with collocations, such as 'make a soil in tight condition' and 'land escaping problems'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'pollination' and 'deforested', the overall range is restricted, and the frequent errors in word choice occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many plants and animals helps', 'pollution are become') and article usage. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and comma usage. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be highly beneficial.

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