Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I feel that there are many several problems of environment such as biodiversity, cutting plants which cause deforestation, and extreme pollution. In addition, increasing use technologies like vehicles which impact on air pollution, so environmental problem is have many views species can affect from less rainfall due to pollution and animals can harm.

Firstly, there are also other issues of environment problem as new technologies can also be harmful for environment, however rapid urbanization can grow the cities, but I affect on deforestation, loss of biodiversity, and natural resources, while creating huge industries they cut the trees which cause the deforestation and that immense pn environment. therefore, government should need to promote sustainable future as it is not able to done by individuals everyone should maintain that, also environment is everyone's responsibility to protect.

On the one hand, people should have to reduce pollution. Environment problem is not only the issue of loss of species of plants and animals there are so much other things which affects on environment pollution. To solve the problem, we can adopt renewable energy such as solar and wind energy can reduce pollution and decrease the dependency on Fossil fuel, also use such material which we can recycle for instance, plastic, paper and metal to protect environment, also conserving water planting trees can make significant in long run.

In conclusion, we preserve plants, animals and micro-organisms interacting with each other and with non-living environment like air, water, and soil. So, forest are also important for ecosystem that provide food, shelter and oxygen while supporting biodiversity. Although, forest can protect animals and make unpolluted environment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on environmental problems and mentioning the importance of biodiversity. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention deforestation and pollution, the arguments are often repetitive and lack depth. The prompt asks for a discussion of both views and your own opinion, but your personal stance is not clearly articulated or sustained throughout the essay. The conclusion introduces new information rather than summarizing your position. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea supported by specific examples or logical reasoning, and explicitly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear transitions and fragmented sentences. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'Firstly' and 'On the one hand', they are often used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. For instance, the transition between the discussion of technology and the call for government action is abrupt. Referencing is also problematic, as it is often unclear what specific nouns pronouns like 'it' or 'that' refer to. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'problems', 'environment', and 'things' throughout the text. There are attempts to use more academic vocabulary such as 'biodiversity', 'deforestation', and 'sustainable', but these are often used in contexts that lack precision or correct collocation. For example, 'immense pn environment' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using a wider range of vocabulary, including collocations and topic-specific terminology, and ensure that words are used accurately in their appropriate context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'environmental problem is have many views'), sentence structure (e.g., 'I affect on deforestation'), and article usage. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making them difficult to follow. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors such as missing prepositions and incorrect word forms.

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