Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar graph illustrates the information regarding the intake of total milk as well as low fat milk in united states from 1970 to 2015 .
At the first glance , it is evident that a significant amount of whole milk was intake by the peoples of united states in year 1970 , and value was accounted at 25 gallons , which is then decline to by 5 gallons after one decade . Afterthat , this value decreasing rapidly until it reach the amount of 10 in year 2000. Thereafter , this consuption of whole milk was still decreasing but moderately , in year 2010 and 2015 intake of whole milk was approximately 8 and 6 , respectively .
Shifting attention towards the rest of information , it is apparent that in first given year , the consuption of low fat milk by united citizens was roughly 6 but this amount increase sharply till 1990 and value being 10 in 1980 and about 14 in 1990 . Interestingly , this value remains constant for 2 decades and value was noticed at 14 gallons after which a negligible decrease can be witnessed and consuption was nearly 13 gallons .
Overall , it is clearly seen that in initial given year the consuption of whole milk was maximum but in last given year the intake of low fat milk was maximum .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 1.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 1.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an essay discussing environmental problems, specifically the loss of species versus other issues. Instead, you have written a report describing a bar graph about milk consumption. This is a fundamental failure to address the task requirements. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which further impacts the score. Because the content does not address the prompt at all, it cannot be assessed for task development or position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. There is some use of cohesive devices such as 'At the first glance', 'Afterthat', and 'Shifting attention towards'. However, the logical progression is irrelevant to the task prompt. The referencing is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing, while present, does not serve the purpose of a discursive essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, focusing on data description (e.g., 'intake', 'consumption', 'value', 'decrease'). There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'intake by the peoples of united states' instead of 'consumed by the people of the United States' and 'value being 10' instead of 'reaching 10'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas, which is expected for an Academic Task 2 essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'intake of total milk as well as low fat milk in united states' (missing articles), 'which is then decline to by 5 gallons' (incorrect verb form), and 'value was accounted at 25 gallons' (incorrect passive construction). Punctuation errors, such as spaces before commas, are also present throughout the text.
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