Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The growing influence environmental problem has sparked various debates. This issue is particularly significant because its impact affect both individuals and communities in multiple ways. In this essay, I will disc discuss view and give your own opinion aspects particular species of plants and animals. On the one benefits of many people not grow the plants. Pollution harm plant and humans. Some does not provide water its plants should not growing food. Some people believes problem facing traffic enjoy the cities life and other opportunities. Plants should not growing the main reason waste of garbage. The government should not provide convenience because of pollution. Pakistani government not recommended People because of impact humans.
Healthy life Very important. in may opinion, human growing the plants and provide animals Vaccination and its impact depends effectively it is managed for Society.
Values and beliefs related to gov government provide &Vaccination plants animals for their health may Sometimes lead to misunderstanding and conflict. Various studies have shown the main problem is pollution and not growing the Plants Vaccination. Some animals benefites Uses of some meat and provided of money. plants provide oxygen and support its healthy life
Body on the other hand despite the benefits animals harm its pollution. People should not provide Vaccination for their death animals can also lead to significant challenges. Animals are important for enviroment. Some animal provided the milk Milk are very important its human health. for example differences not i
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. While it mentions environmental issues, the arguments are disjointed, repetitive, and lack a clear, logical position. The essay does not adequately discuss both views as required; instead, it presents fragmented sentences about pollution, vaccination, and plants without developing a coherent argument. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. The content is often off-topic or confusing, making it difficult to identify a clear stance on whether species loss is the most pressing environmental problem.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. Paragraphing is used, but the content within these paragraphs does not follow a clear progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel like a collection of unrelated statements. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between ideas is abrupt or non-existent. The overall arrangement is not coherent, as the reader struggles to follow the writer's train of thought due to the lack of logical flow and poor sentence connectivity.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often used incorrectly. There is significant repetition of basic words like 'plants', 'animals', and 'pollution'. Many phrases are used in ways that do not make sense in context, such as 'provide Vaccination for their death animals'. The lack of control over word choice and collocation frequently impedes communication. The writer struggles to express complex ideas due to a restricted range of vocabulary, and there are frequent errors in word formation and usage that make the text difficult to interpret.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is highly problematic throughout the essay. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage, such as 'Plants should not growing' and 'Some people believes'. The response relies on simple, often broken, sentence structures. Complex sentences are attempted but are almost always grammatically incorrect, which distorts the intended meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the high frequency of errors causes significant difficulty for the reader. The lack of grammatical control is a major barrier to clear communication.
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