Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The world has encountered great revolutions, inventions and wars in the recent few centuries. This led to the change in the way the world and it people function. In this despite competitive world some individuals argue that the loss of specific kinds of plants and animal is major problem to our environment while contend that there are some other reasons.

Firstly, let's take first opinion which of states that the process of particular animals and plants is a major threat to our world. When any of living organism to tally vanish from the nature. Then it is near to impossible to that this same creature will came into existence again. Such as dinasours and mammoths. Some researehers have shown that the main reason behind it is our carelessness

However, Every coin has its two sides, so opponent are of the opinion that pollution from our vehicles, industries and deforestation is destroying our atmosphere. On this side of the argument, those who support this idea also claim that the authorities should have to place strict restrictions on new schemes of constructing the unnecessary infrastructure that are harming our surroundings. Furthermore, an ancient cars and factories which cause pollution should be renewed or refurbished

Finally, despite many claims and assumptions about disturbing environment and taking everything into consideration, I would say that losing rare kinds of plants and animals is larger concern instead of other natural difficulties. Therefore, we shouldn't go on hunting of animals and cut vanishing greenery for just for our mean

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion in the conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited. For example, the explanation of why species loss is a major threat is brief and relies on simple examples like dinosaurs. The discussion of alternative environmental problems is also somewhat superficial, focusing on general pollution without deep analysis. To improve, you should expand on your arguments with more specific evidence or logical reasoning. While the prompt is addressed, the depth of the response is closer to the Band 5 level, as the ideas are presented but not fully extended or supported with sufficient detail.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, the phrase 'Firstly, let's take first opinion which of states that' is grammatically awkward and disrupts the flow. Transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, such as the jump from discussing species loss to the mention of dinosaurs. While there is a logical progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional misuse of referencing make the cohesion feel somewhat repetitive and forced. Improving the variety of transition signals would significantly enhance the readability.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You use basic terms like 'main reason', 'big problem', and 'unnecessary infrastructure'. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'process of particular animals' (likely meaning 'extinction') and 'cut vanishing greenery' (which is confusing). Spelling errors like 'dinasours' and 'researehers' also occur. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, such as 'biodiversity loss' instead of 'loss of particular kinds of plants and animals', and ensure that your word choices accurately reflect the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'it people function' (should be 'its people'), 'When any of living organism to tally vanish' (incorrect verb form and article usage), and 'the authorities should have to place'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences ending abruptly or missing necessary commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage would be a good starting point.

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