Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In the modern globalised world, some people informs that the main environmental causes of our time period is the loss of different species of plants and animals.While other are saying that there are even more important environmental causes.
In the commence, modern global is developing in different technologies. environments needs more space to make developing in different types and space are involved in this generation with huge amount of trees and where animals also live, But for developing the any area they cut off the plants, trees and by seeing this animals are also running far away and by fault animals are been find dead because their food they it are been cut by people who want to develop.
Secondly, this generation have increase in industries and many others factories. So, by this a air pollution is increases that may causes to animals and humans both. new projects are been made by builder
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both views, the discussion is superficial and lacks the depth required for an Academic Task 2 response. The student does not clearly state an opinion, and the arguments regarding environmental problems are underdeveloped and repetitive. The response is far too short to fully address all parts of the prompt, leading to a low score in this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'by this' or 'so'. Transitions between ideas are abrupt, and the lack of a clear introduction and conclusion makes the overall structure feel disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought throughout the short text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate, which limits the ability to express complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'some people informs' instead of 'some people argue' and 'modern global is developing' instead of 'the modern world is developing'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss environmental issues with any precision, and the repetition of simple words like 'developing' and 'animals' hinders the quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures with frequent errors. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'environments needs', 'a air pollution is increases') and tense usage (e.g., 'animals are been find dead'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, and the sentence construction is often awkward, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always grammatically incorrect.
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