Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

FEW PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT THE MAIN ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEM OF OUR TIME IS THE LOSS OF PARTICULAR FLAURA AND FAUNA . WHILE OTHERS FELT THAT THERE ARE MORE SEVERAL ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEMS. THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE BOTH VIEW AND ALSO SUGGEST MY OWN PERSPECTIVE.

TO COMMENCE WITH , THE MAIN PROBLEM HAPPENED IN RECENT TIME WAS DISAPPEREANCE OF PLANTS AND ANIMAL THESE IS BECAUSE THERE IS NO MORE AVALIBILITY OF RESOURCES AS WELL AS TREATMENTS FOR SAVING THEIR LIFE. IN PAST EVERY BODY WAS CONCERNED WITH WILDLIFE AS WELL AS PRESERVING PLANTS BUT ANIMALS NOWADAYS USED FOR MANY PURPOSE WHICH LED TO THE DEATH OF IT LIKE USING DIFFERENT AND ATTRACTIVE ANIMALS FOR RUNNING ENTERTAINMENT ACTIVITY LIKE CIRCUS WHERE ANIMALS WERE TREATED VERY BADLY AND OVER USE OF ANIMALS IN SUCH ACTIVITIES WHICH ARE VERY UNIQUE TO WATCH.

ON OTHER HAND , THERE ARE PEOPLE WHO THINKS THAT APART FROM EXTICTIONS OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS SEVERAL OTHJER ENVIRONMENT ISSUES HAPPENED LIKE DIFFERENT TYPES OF POLLUTION INCLUDES AIR , WATER , AND NOISE POLLUTION , THESE SEEMS TO HAVE WORST IMPACT ON PEOPLE LIVING IN COUNTRY BECAUSE WATER POLLUTUION IS MAINLY DONE BY INDUSTRIALIST WHILE AIR POLLUTION BY CHEMICAL FIRMS AND NOISE BY INDIVIDUALS USING VARIOUS VEHICLES THE MAIN CONCERN NOWADAYS IS FOR GLOBAL WARMING AS OZONE LAYER IS GETTING DEPLETED WHICH RESULT AS WHOLES IN LAYER OF ATMOSPHERE DUE TO WHICH EVERYONE SUFFERS A LOT. FOR EXAMPLE DIRECT UV RAYS LEADS TO VARIOUS HEALTH DISEASES AS WELL AS SKIN PROBLEM WHICH ALSO ONE KIND OF PROBLEM RELATED TO ENVIRONMENT AS THERE IS STABLILITY IN WEATHER CONDITIONS WHICH ALSO HAS EFFECTS ON PLANTS , ANIMAL AND PEOPLE

TO CONCLUDE , ISSUE OCCUR BY HUMAN BEHAVIOUR LIKE POLLUTION CAN BE CONTROL BY HUMANS AND GOVERNMENT BY TAKING MEASURES TO PREVENT IT AS OTHER CANNOT BE CONTROLLED.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views regarding environmental problems, but the development is uneven. While you mention the loss of species and other issues like pollution and global warming, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. The 'opinion' is mentioned in the introduction but is not clearly sustained or fully integrated into the conclusion, which is quite brief and lacks a summary of the main points. To improve, ensure each body paragraph has a clear topic sentence and a well-developed explanation that directly links back to the prompt's core question.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of effective cohesive devices. Transitions like 'To commence with' and 'On other hand' are used, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed. For instance, the transition between the discussion of animal extinction and the mention of circuses is abrupt. Furthermore, the use of referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each sentence flows naturally from the previous one will enhance coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'flaura', 'extictions', 'othjer') and word choice issues (e.g., 'more several', 'industrialist' used to mean 'industrial activities'). You rely on basic vocabulary, and some phrases are repetitive or unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensuring correct spelling. Expanding your range to include less common lexical items related to the environment would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there are people who thinks'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'the main problem happened in recent time'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors will help improve your score.

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