Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individuals widely acknowledged that, the major causes of natural challenges of in this modern era particularly by extinction of some species of plant and animals. While other believe that there are another factories of behind this issue. In this essay, first i will discussed both the view points then deduce my own opinion

Proponents of the first view point contain that, First and foremost, recently many studies shows that many plant and animals are considerably extinct, scientists claim that the humans are main reason for behind this, To elaborate it, every year factories increasing their production rate for their own needs and economy perspective , but it lead to negative impact on biodiversity. For example, in many nations deforestation are very common as this trend animals lost their natural habitats. Hence, many animal species are not more longer survived.

Advocates of the second view point maintain that, not loss of plants and animals are the major problem of environment there have some common challenges that earth face such as every year temperature increasing slightly and glaciers were melt, ozone layer may in danger for higher IQ of pollution. Many researchers say that if all nations are not work together so in some decades humans and living organisms will also started to extinct.

In my opinion, undoubtfully animals and plants extinction are the biggest environment problem major cause of deforestation authorities will take action on that. However, there are also some common problems which if all countries give their attention such as climate change and higher IQ in some advanced cities the government should take action on that and introduced some polici

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding species loss and climate change are somewhat superficial and lack specific, well-explained examples. For instance, the mention of 'higher IQ of pollution' is unclear and does not effectively support the argument. The position is stated, but the reasoning remains underdeveloped, preventing a higher score. To improve, you should focus on providing more detailed explanations and concrete evidence for each viewpoint discussed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Proponents of the first view point contain that' and 'To elaborate it'. There are also issues with referencing and logical flow between sentences. Some transitions feel forced, and the connection between ideas is occasionally weak, making the progression of the argument feel disjointed at times. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a smoother flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of incorrect word choice or awkward collocations, such as 'another factories of behind this issue' and 'higher IQ of pollution'. The repetition of basic terms like 'problem' and 'action' limits the range. To achieve a higher band, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that words are used in their correct context. Expanding your range of synonyms and collocations will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('many studies shows'), incorrect verb tenses ('will also started to extinct'), and awkward sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas and missing full stops. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often marred by errors that can occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and article usage would be a beneficial next step.

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