Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is a highly debatable issue in the modern society. Some people thought that diminishing of species of plant and animals are main factor of environmental . But others say that there are more different problems . In the following paragraphs I shall put forth my arguments to support my views

On the one hand , we have to make some conversation ways to protect from extinct of species of plant and animals, because it is the part of our ecosystem that helps to change and growth of our environment . Government should take over this steps by banning on deforestation and poaching . Plants and animals helps in many ways of human lives like scientists doing research on rats, frogs and dogs to invent new medicines and vaccinations for human diseases as well as animals . From plants we get better food , oxygen that need in our daily lives .

On the other hand , environmental problems like air pollution , water pollution and noise pollution that only man-made causes that effect to the environment. Air pollution like smoking , smoke from vehicles , industries ,burning of any objects that cause many health diseases and harm to air .

for example, nowadays people have to increase their capital of company by getting new vegetation land that have many benefits cause into dried property(that cause loss of vegetation in that area ) for some manufacture goods .

To put nut in shell , my pen down saying that environmental problems are our problems so took first step to stop diminishing natural factors such as land , river , air or so on .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both views regarding environmental problems, but the development is inconsistent. While you mention the importance of biodiversity and contrast it with pollution, the arguments are somewhat superficial. For instance, the explanation of why species loss is a problem is brief, and the discussion on pollution lacks depth. Your own opinion is mentioned in the introduction but is not clearly sustained or fully integrated into the conclusion. To improve, ensure each body paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides more detailed, logical support for your claims rather than listing general points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'To put nut in shell' and 'my pen down saying'. These phrases are not standard English and hinder the flow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between ideas feels abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'conversation ways' instead of 'conservation methods' and 'extinct' used as a noun instead of 'extinction'. Phrases like 'increase their capital of company' and 'dried property' are awkward and make the meaning difficult to follow. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of precision and frequent errors in collocation suggest a need to focus on learning words in context rather than in isolation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Plants and animals helps'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain fragments, and the attempt at complex structures often results in errors (e.g., 'that only man-made causes that effect to the environment'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score.

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