Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

NOW A DAYS ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEM IS GROWING TEND AMONG INDIVIDUALS ACROSS THE WORLD

I BELIEVED THAT SOME INDIVIDUALS SAYS THAT MAIN ECOLOGICAL ISSUE OF OUR TIME IS THE DECLINE OF SPECIFIC SPECIES. OTHER SAY THAT THERE IS MORE SIGNIFICANT ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEMS.

I THIS ESSAY I WILL SPECIFY RATIONAL VIEWPOINT FROM MY PERSPECTIVE TO JUSTIFY THE TOPIC PROMINENTLY

I MY OPINION THE ECOLOGICAL ISSUE ALL THE SPECIES AND ANIMALS MAKE THE IMPORTANCE ROLES IN OUR LIFE.

THE LOSES OF THE ANIMALS AND PLANTS ARE HAVING THE CRUCIAL PART OF LIFE ALTHOUGH THE OTHER PROBLEMS OF ENVIRONMENTAL HAVE HUGE CHANGE IN THE CLIMATE

ON THE ONE HAND, UNDOUBTEDLY THE DECLINE OF MAMMALS AND TREES ARE HAVING THE IMPORTANT ROLE IN ALL THE INDIVIDUALS BECAUSE ANIMALS ARE ALSO USED AS THE FOOD TO MANY PEOPLES AND ALSO THE ANIMALS HAVE THE PART OF ROLE TO DO THE CROP PLANTING BY THERE WASTE , PLANTS ARE USE D TO GIVE THE MANY FRUIT AND VEGETABLES TO THE HUMANS

FOR EXAMPLE ACCORDING TO A RECENT SERVEY CONDUCTED BY WESTERN SYDNEY UNIVERSITY WHICH STATES THAT NEARLY 43% OF THE COUNTRIES IN THE WORLD HAVE EXPERIENCED THAT THE DECREASE OF THE TYPES OF ANIMALS AND PLANTS CRUCIAL ROLE IN THE STUDENTS

ON THE OTHER HAND, INDEED THE OTHER SCENARIO THE CONCERN OF ENVIRONMENTAL BULK CHANGE CLIMATE

SINCE THE CLIMATE HAVE THE BIG ROE FOR THE CROP,TRESS. THE CHANGE OF CLIMATE IS BASED ON THE GREENHOUSE GASSES AND POLLUTION .

FOR INSTANCE,ACCORDING TO LATEST RESEARCH CARRIED OUT BY UNITED STATES OF CENTRAL UNIVERSITY WHICH VIVIDLY REVEAL THAT AROUND 45% OF THE NATION ACROSS THE WORLD REPORTED THAT IMPORTANT OF THE CLIMATE

TO SUM UP THE DECLINE OF THE MAMMALS AND PLANTS ALTHROUGH THEY ARE MANY OTHER IMPORTANT PROBLEMS LIKE CLIMATE .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views regarding the loss of species versus other environmental issues, but the development is limited. The arguments are repetitive and lack depth, particularly in the explanation of how species loss impacts humans. While a position is stated, it is not consistently maintained or clearly argued throughout the essay. The examples provided, such as the 'Western Sydney University' survey, are vague and lack specific detail, which weakens the overall persuasiveness of the response. To improve, you should focus on providing more detailed explanations for your points and ensuring your own opinion is clearly integrated into the structure of the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', 'To sum up'), they are sometimes used incorrectly or in a way that does not effectively link the sentences. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between ideas is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks a clear topic sentence and supporting evidence that flows naturally. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a singular, clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'important', 'role', and 'environmental'. There are several instances of word choice errors, such as 'growing tend' instead of 'growing trend' and 'environmental bulk change' which is unclear. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'mammals' to refer to all species. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you should work on using a wider variety of topic-specific vocabulary and focus on correct collocations, such as 'climate change' rather than 'change of climate'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some individuals says', 'climate have the big roe'), article usage (e.g., 'the other problems of environmental'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to follow. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are almost always inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like missing or misused articles and prepositions.

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