Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The citizens say that main issue with environmental to loss their particular time and species of plants and animals, Furthermore strength environmental issue .

Overall, both some individuals believe that environmental can increase time with particular plants and animals, others citizens believe that important environmental issue.

on the one hand, some individuals believe that main environmental issue of the time increase of work sometimes loss particular plants and animals, A good example plants can growth in environmental it gives us to good health for body moreover remove disease occurs environmental gives good atmosphere which involves rainy and summer seasons like to grow plants in summer it it gives a shadow to sit outside, animals are such as like dig, cat, hen are pet animals they can stay mostly besides the home dogs can identify while new citizens comes at home it can save our life, hens are gives good meals to cook, cat can gives inside the home it can catch the rats.

on the other hand, other believes important environmental issue environmental is reduce the plastic items, give good oxygen for human begins in the world, A good example that environmental can reduce stress who are working in IT organization the people has more stress and it gives peace not only but also give positive things, energy environmental is not a issue it is main big thing of world who living as a human begin.

In conclusion by the environmental main issue has it may occurs sometime issues and However sometimes it gives good for people it helps to rainy at the season of rainy time it involves like reduce stress, remove lone less.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both sides of the argument regarding environmental issues; however, the ideas are often unclear or irrelevant. The student struggles to articulate the concept of biodiversity loss, instead focusing on unrelated points like the benefits of pets or IT stress. The position is not clearly established or maintained throughout the essay. Many arguments are underdeveloped or lack logical connection to the prompt, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended message. To improve, the student should focus on directly answering the prompt's specific question about species loss versus other environmental concerns.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or placed incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'A good example' followed by unrelated content. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the lack of clear topic sentences makes it hard to identify the main point of each paragraph. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the flow between sentences is often interrupted by grammatical errors, which hinders the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There is frequent misuse of words, such as 'human begins' instead of 'human beings' and 'lone less' instead of 'loneliness'. The student relies on basic, repetitive vocabulary, and attempts to use more complex terms often result in word-choice errors that impede communication. The range is insufficient to express ideas with precision, and the frequent spelling errors further detract from the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that significantly affect readability. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence fragments, and incorrect word order (e.g., 'the citizens say that main issue with environmental to loss their particular time'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Simple sentences are also prone to errors in punctuation and basic syntax. The high frequency of errors makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the intended meaning of the sentences.

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