Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Number of persons say that the loss of plants and animal is main enviromental problem but other people think that there are some other problem of environmental problem .
To begin with, Higher amount of animal and plants are lossing these day and there are bad effects on enviroment . firstly soil problem are start in forest because persons cutting trees for their needs as a result soil change into soilerosion, soil can not growth any vegetable and food , soil change into desert soil , The percentage of oxygen is decarese day by day and the percenatage of co2 are increase day by day . For example in india the percentage of oxygen are decarese day by day because only plants can cerate oxygen Number of trees are cutting by mans
However , There are some other issues of environmental problems. factory put harmul waste things in rivers and factory emitt smoke in sky . harmful gases mixed in air as a result air pollution and water pollution are increase.For example in china Number of factory are avaiable in china as and they put harmful waste things in rivers and land as will as they emitt harmful smoke in sky as result china is a 2 country of enviroment pollution.
In conclusion ,I have written both view of environmental problem
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While both views are mentioned, the discussion is superficial and lacks the depth required for an Academic Task 2 essay. The student fails to provide a clear personal opinion, which is a specific requirement of the prompt. The arguments regarding deforestation and pollution are repetitive and lack sufficient supporting evidence or logical extension. Due to the under-length and the lack of a clear position, the response does not fully address all parts of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'day by day' and 'as a result'. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, and the transition between the two views is abrupt. Referencing is often unclear, and the overall structure feels underdeveloped, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument's development throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'soil can not growth any vegetable' and 'factory put harmul waste things'. The student relies on basic, often inaccurate terminology, such as 'Number of persons' instead of 'Many people' or 'in sky' instead of 'in the atmosphere'. The lack of variety and the persistent errors in word formation and usage significantly hinder the clarity of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('percentage of oxygen are decarese'), article usage, and sentence structure. The essay relies almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex constructions are consistently faulty. Punctuation is also problematic, with irregular spacing and misuse of commas. The high frequency of basic errors in almost every sentence indicates a lack of control over fundamental grammatical rules.
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