Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In current time , many countries are facing environmental issues ,such as deforestation and soil pollution . Some individuals consider that the major problem of the present time is the loss of diversity of species of tress and creatures.
While , other environmental issues are crucial . I think that other issues are more critical than plants and animal .
To begin with, species of plants and animals are very important for food chain , if this chain is disturb ,which have very negative impact on human's life. The the plants are very useful for individuals life; source of food , medicines and for household things. Furthermore, plants and animals are very important because through which people can be used it in their life for making things .These all things have good quality , which can be used for long time. for example, in India have lots rules about use of plants and animals in manufacturing products.
On the other hands, there are problems are very vital than this issues , like pollution , this is very major problems in mega cities .In which air pollution is major, due to large amount of industries and heavy traffic . This can create many issues in cities and people have problems for living and breathing . Moreover , other issue is noise which is associated with citiys'life . this is created by the traffic jams and different factions , celebrating events.
To conclude , the loss of plants and animals is important but not more than the pollution because it has major imct on human's life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention the importance of the food chain and the utility of plants, the arguments are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the example regarding India is vague and does not clearly support the argument about species loss. To improve, you should provide more specific, well-explained examples and ensure that your arguments are fully developed rather than just stated. The conclusion is brief and could more effectively summarise the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'While , other environmental issues are crucial' is grammatically disjointed and does not function well as a transition. There are also issues with referencing; phrases like 'These all things' are unclear. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by these awkward transitions. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') more naturally and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'important', 'problems', and 'things' repeatedly. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'diversity of species of tress and creatures' (trees) and 'factions' (likely meaning 'functions' or 'festivities'). To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to environmental science, such as 'biodiversity', 'ecosystem services', 'industrial emissions', or 'urban congestion', and ensure you are using words in their correct context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Common issues include incorrect article usage ('the plants', 'the food chain'), subject-verb agreement ('species... is', 'problems are very vital'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. For example, 'if this chain is disturb ,which have very negative impact' contains multiple errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of relative clauses. Proofreading for punctuation errors, particularly around commas and periods, will also significantly improve your score.
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