Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This essay will discuss both sides of this issue and give my opinion many people can ask the main environmental issue of our loss particular species of plant and animals i will completly explaion in these essay in upcoming pragraphs

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to discuss both views on environmental problems and offers a personal opinion, thus addressing all parts of the task in a broad sense. However, the development of ideas is severely hindered by significant language barriers and lack of clarity. For instance, the writer mentions 'increasing population on city' and 'destory cemical on daily reoutine', which makes the core arguments difficult to follow. The position is stated but remains very weak and underdeveloped throughout the essay. The ideas presented are often repetitive and lack specific supporting details, relying heavily on vague generalisations such as 'some time animals west and used thing drop in open aira'. Consequently, the task response is limited and falls into the lower bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks proper organisation, logical progression, and cohesion. Although the writer attempts to use transitional markers such as 'To commence with' and 'On the other hand', these phrases are misused or do not logically connect the thoughts. Paragraphing is highly problematic; the essay essentially consists of an introduction followed by one massive block of text, another weak body paragraph, and a jumbled conclusion. There is a total absence of full stops and proper punctuation throughout the body paragraphs, which creates run-on sentences that make reading extremely difficult. Referencing and pronoun use are also frequently unclear, leading to a breakdown in the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary range is basic and heavily restricted. The student uses simple, repetitive words and struggles significantly with word choice and spelling. Examples of severe lexical inaccuracies include 'destory', 'cemical', 'reoutine', 'damged', 'air a reasion', and 'west'. Uncommon vocabulary is attempted but consistently misused, such as 'maxid' (mixed), 'frish' (fresh), and 'jile' (jail). These errors frequently impede communication, as the reader has to guess the intended meaning of many phrases. Spelling and morphological mistakes are pervasive throughout the entire text, pulling the lexical score down significantly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 3.5

Grammatical control is extremely weak. The response contains almost no standard, error-free sentences, and the total lack of punctuation (such as periods and commas) results in a continuous stream of ungrammatical clauses. The writer attempts complex structures, but these are almost always faulty, featuring severe errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and clause connection, such as 'many people can ask the main environmental issue of our loss particular species'. Word order is frequently unnatural, and basic grammatical boundaries are ignored. The frequency and density of errors cause continuous difficulty and strain for the reader.

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