Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Majority of inhabitants thinks that the crucial environmental issue of this age is the misplaced of specific species of plants and animals. Furthermore, one group of individuals thoughts that there more vital environmental controversy. In my prespective, animals and plants plays significant role in our environment but there different types of plants and animals some of them are gave benefits to our environment and other cause to damage ours society. Firstly, majority of populace thoughts that some animals and plants cause to remove water under the soil such as eucalyptus plants mostly found in australia and its main factor to remove water beneath soil and in animals mostly sankes cause to serious damage and death of a person by cutting . For example, Eucalyptus pland and snakes both casued environment to be in stage of emergency by damaging under water and by cutting of snakes. Secondly, some people believe that animals and plants are the factors to holds on the biodiversity and gave benefits to inhabitants. In zoo, different types of animals are captured such as lion, snakes, deer, elephant,and in nursery farm there are various types of plants such as oranges, mangoes, bananas, and these fruits are benefical for our health. For example, buffalo and cows gives milk to us and plants also gave fruits to us for eating mostly pllants are rare for fragrance to spread it. At last, we have to need to decide which type of animals and plants are benefical for our health and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding whether species loss is the most crucial environmental problem, along with a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat confused. The student misinterprets the prompt in places, arguing that some plants and animals cause damage rather than focusing fully on the debate surrounding biodiversity loss versus other global environmental issues. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, stopping abruptly at 249 words, which fails to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. This under-length results in a direct penalty to Task Achievement, as the conclusion and final points are missing entirely. To improve, the writer must ensure they fully address all parts of the prompt, expand their arguments logically without digressing into irrelevant claims about harmful plants and snakes, and consistently write past the minimum word count.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay displays some basic attempts at logical organisation with transitional markers such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', but the overall progression is weak. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the entire body of the essay essentially compressed into a single massive block of text despite initial attempts at signposting. Cohesive devices are repetitive and often inaccurate, such as 'At last, we have to need to decide...' leading into an unfinished sentence. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the lack of a proper conclusion disrupts the flow of the text. To enhance cohesion, the writer should break thoughts down into distinct, well-structured paragraphs, use a wider variety of cohesive ties naturally, and ensure every sentence connects logically to the central theme.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, demonstrating a restricted range. The student relies on elementary terms and makes frequent word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'misplaced' instead of 'loss', 'thoughts' instead of 'thought' or 'think', and 'cutting' instead of 'bites' or 'venom'. Phrases like 'cause to remove water' and 'rare for fragrance to spread it' show a lack of precision and unnatural phrasing. There are also spelling errors like 'prespective' and 'benefical'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a rudimentary message, the numerous lexical inaccuracies and limited range prevent the writer from achieving a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily flawed, dominated by frequent errors that often impede comprehension. The writer struggles with basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, as seen in phrases like 'Majority of inhabitants thinks' and 'plants also gave fruits'. Complex structures are attempted but are generally faulty, such as run-on sentences joined poorly with coordinating conjunctions or relative clauses (e.g., 'in zoo, different types of animals are captured such as... and in nursery farm there are...'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing periods and unfinished clauses. A wider mix of accurate simple and complex forms with close attention to basic grammar rules is required to move up the bands.

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