Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 14 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
many years ago, earith was seafer place to all kined of humanbeing and other species. but over the years life have in significantly and crucial amount of environmental problem showed up. this essay will discuss the both argumants on whither loss of particular species is the most significant problem or if thers is more important environmental problems.
in the recent research for Dr.Ahmed he mentioned in his book that the majority of people believe the decrease in the amount of species is the most essential problem nawadays. because the decline may cause others problem such as lake of nutritions which can lead to health issues. Moreover, the decline in plants may effect in the qualite of air. For example, less trees lead to a growth in air pollutions and that will help in more and more environment issues.
Furthermore, others argue that thire is environmental problems which as imortant as loss of species. because other prblems can show more qiuker result in just short time. And this lead to lake of development. For istance, the growth in the population result in alot side affect such as pollution
in conclusion, while some people believe in decrease in the sort of animals and other species has crucial effect other believe that thire is mor significant environmantal issues. personally i think thire is more important problams than loss of particular species. duo to other issue can develop rabdily and can cause important effact in the whole world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views—that the loss of species is the main environmental problem and that other issues are more important—while providing a personal opinion. However, the ideas are somewhat underdeveloped and lack detailed, fully articulated support. Furthermore, an important deduction must be applied because the response contains 244 words, falling slightly short of the 250-word minimum requirement specified for IELTS Writing Task 2. Consequently, the task achievement is constrained to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which provides a basic organisational structure. There is an introduction, body paragraphs addressing different perspectives, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, such as 'Furthermore, others argue that thire is environmental problems which as imortant as loss of species'. Referencing and logical transitions are occasionally unclear, and punctuation errors disrupt the flow. Overall, the organizational features are adequate for a Band 5.0 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors that permeate the text, such as 'earith', 'seafer', 'kined', 'humanbeing', 'nawadays', 'lake', 'effect' instead of affect, and 'rabdily'. While the writer attempts some topic-specific terms like 'environment', 'species', and 'pollution', the severe spelling and morphological inaccuracies impede communication at times and place the response firmly in the Band 4.0 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is very low throughout the text. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'life have in significantly', 'others argument'), article usage, and prepositions. Sentence boundary errors, fragments, and missing words are frequent, such as 'thire is environmental problems which as imortant' and 'duo to other issue can develop rabdily'. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
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